Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

It is observed in many countries that less and less people nowadays go to the cinema to watch movies. What could be the possible cause and solution of this? v.3

It is observed in many countries that less and less people nowadays go to the cinema to watch movies. What could be the possible cause and solution of this? v. 3
It is true that cinemas have not been attracting much public these days. There could be several reasons for this trend and to change this it is necessary to take some measures to make cinemas attractive again. There are various reasons why people are not going to the cinema as much lately. One of the reasons is the easy access to the internet and the availability of thousands of movies to be downloaded. If one can watch a movie for free at home, it is hard to find a motivation to pay for it at the cinema. Another reason is that the price of the tickets has increased significantly. It is undeniable that the recent advances in technology have improved the experience of watching a movie in several ways. However, cinemas need to find better solutions to manage the costs of this new technology without overcharging the customers. Some measures are quite simple to put in place and can make a huge difference in the attendance numbers. For example, the creation of promotions that reduce the price of the ticket on specific days of the week or give a discount to loyal customers. Another action that could be taken is to promote more the launching of a new movie. One example would be to create an event related to the theme of the movie, like a costume session for people to dress up like the characters of the movie. In conclusion, there are several actions that can be taken to attract people to the cinemas again. It is a matter of showing them that they are getting a good value for their money.
It is true that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
have not been attracting much public these days. There could be several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
for this trend and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
this it is necessary to take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
attractive again.

There are various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are not going to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
as much lately. One of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
is the easy access to the internet and the availability of thousands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
to
be downloaded
. If one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
for free at home, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to find a motivation to pay for it at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
. Another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
is that the price of the tickets has increased
significantly
. It is undeniable that the recent advances in technology have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
the experience of watching a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
in several ways.
However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
need to find better solutions to manage the costs of this new technology without overcharging the customers.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
measures are quite simple to put in place and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a huge difference in the attendance numbers.
For example
, the creation of promotions that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the price of the ticket on specific days of the week or give a discount to loyal customers. Another action that could
be taken
is to promote more the launching of a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
. One example would be to create an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
related to the theme of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
, like a costume session for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to dress up like the characters of the movie.

In conclusion
, there are several actions that can
be taken
to attract
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
again. It is a matter of showing them that they are getting a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
value for their money.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay It is observed in many countries that less and less people nowadays go to the cinema to watch movies. What could be the possible cause and solution of this? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts