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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? v.2

In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. v. 2
In this modern world whether strict rules should be followed by children or not is a very critical and controversial issue. As we know that children are living in different societies and cultures, their behaviour and metal structures are different as well. For example, in Pakistan, more social and loyalty could be observed among children and they respect their parents in a very charming way. While respect is very common, friendly relationship among parents and children are not. On the contrary, in European countries, it is a bit different. In these countries, children have their own motto and they do those types of tasks only which they have set in their minds. However, they have a better and friendly relationship with their parents. So overall strict rules would not be suitable for all geographic locations, which might be helpful in some parts of the world. The strict rules in children behaviour have some advantages but also have some drawbacks which are discussed below. First of all the children under strict rules and code of conduct will be responsible and very respectful to the parents, elder people and to the society. Such children build a stable and attractive society. The children in such society feel himself a responsible citizen, mature, and know how to treat others in the society in a respectful way. And the society of such children is free of heinous crimes and drug abuses. On the other hand, children who do not follow strict rules of behaviour become rude, selfish and undisciplined. And such children create hurdles in the society which create bad impacts on a society. And for such children, the government also try to develop such a law to demolish such bad elements from the society. Strict rules for children often have very bad psychological and social problems. It is not unusual that parents who bit their children would be hated and not respected by the children at a later stage. Strict rules hinder the creativity among children and make them under-developed mentally. A friendly relationship between parents and kids is often helpful for a better future generation. Strict rules are temporary but love and respects are long lasting. Hence parents should try to be friendly with kids and try to explain the right from wrongs. In many society children’s rude and unexpected behaviour are rooted to the too much strict regulation they were imposed. Hence, a set if strict rules is not always a better option to nurture kids. It is concluded from this topic that Children under strict rule behaviour have a good moral character and responsible adults but sometimes this is not a good option and have negative impacts. So I would opine that friendly relationship, some freedom as well as some rigid rules should be combined to nurture the children and for their betterment.
In this modern world whether
strict
rules
should
be followed
by
children
or not is a
very
critical and controversial issue. As we know that
children
are living in
different
societies
and cultures, their
behaviour
and metal structures are
different
as well
.
For example
, in Pakistan, more social and loyalty could
be observed
among
children and
they respect their
parents
in a
very
charming way. While respect is
very
common,
friendly
relationship
among
parents
and
children
are not.
On the contrary
, in European countries, it is a bit
different
. In these countries,
children
have their
own
motto and
they do those types of tasks
only
which they have set in their minds.
However
, they have a better and
friendly
relationship
with their
parents
.
So
overall
strict
rules
would not be suitable for all geographic locations, which might be helpful in
some
parts of the world. The
strict
rules
in
children
behaviour
have
some
advantages
but
also
have
some
drawbacks which
are discussed
below.

First of all
the
children
under
strict
rules
and code of conduct will be responsible and
very
respectful to the
parents
, elder
people
and to the
society
. Such
children
build a stable and attractive
society
. The
children
in such
society
feel himself a responsible citizen, mature, and know how to treat others in the
society
in a respectful way
. And the
society
of such
children
is free of heinous crimes and drug abuses.
On the other hand
,
children
who do not follow
strict
rules
of
behaviour
become rude, selfish and undisciplined. And such
children
create hurdles in the
society
which create
bad
impacts on a
society
. And for such
children
, the
government
also
try to develop such a law to demolish such
bad
elements from the society.

Strict
rules
for
children
often
have
very
bad
psychological and social problems. It is not unusual that
parents
who bit their
children
would
be hated
and not respected by the
children
at a later stage.
Strict
rules
hinder the creativity among
children
and
make
them under-developed mentally. A
friendly
relationship
between
parents
and kids is
often
helpful for a better future generation.
Strict
rules
are temporary
but
love
and respects are
long lasting
.
Hence
parents
should try to be
friendly
with kids and try to
explain
the right from wrongs. In
many
society
children’s
rude and unexpected
behaviour
are rooted
to the too much
strict
regulation they
were imposed
.
Hence
, a set if
strict
rules
is not always a better option to nurture kids.

It
is concluded
from this topic that
Children
under
strict
rule
behaviour
have a
good
moral character and responsible adults
but
sometimes
this is not a
good
option and have
negative
impacts.
So
I would opine that
friendly
relationship
,
some
freedom
as well
as
some
rigid
rules
should
be combined
to nurture the
children
and for their betterment.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. v. 2

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