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Some people say that success is ‘10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work’. Is hard work the key to success, or is talent also important? v.1

Some people say that success is ‘10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work’. Is hard work the key to success, or is talent also important? v. 1
When it comes to the issue of success, a myriad of perspectives has been put forth. Some stick to the idea that hard work plays a key role in success whereas others are on the view that talent is an inseparable part of success. I personally state that the viewpoint put forward by the first group is more logical. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on my reasons for this viewpoint. The price of success is hard work. Perseverance gives rise to success. Individuals, who always succeed, try all times and never give up. It does not matter how many times they fail, they do not give up and stop their attempt till they reach their goal. They never call themselves failure! They really subscribe to the idea that the greatest accomplishment is not in falling down but in rising again and again after falling hard which sets the stage for success. With regard to the issue of gaining success, they really believe that winners never quit and quitters never win. On the other hand, just hard work without believing in ourselves and certain talents does not serve to achieve success. What is in our mind and how positive we think prepares the ground for physical action and eventually gives rise to hard work and gaining success. If we believe that we can achieve to whatever we want and we remove the negative thoughts which serve as mental barriers, we certainly succeed in gaining our goals. Having purpose is also important to work hard. If we know what we really want and why we need it clarifies our purpose which has beneficial effects on hard working. So, besides being hard working person it is essential to be hard planning person too. In my view, I really concede that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work hard. Hard work and self-disciplined perform a pivotal role in gaining success, having a purpose and believe in ourselves are also required along with the hard work.
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, a myriad of perspectives has
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stick to the
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idea
that
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hard
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work
plays a key role in
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success
whereas others are on the view that talent is an inseparable part of
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success
. I
personally
state that the viewpoint put forward by the
first
group is more logical. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on my reasons for this viewpoint.

The price of
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success
is
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hard
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work
. Perseverance
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gives
rise to
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success
. Individuals, who always succeed, try all times and never
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give
up. It does not matter how
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many
times they fail, they do not
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give
up and
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stop
their attempt till they reach their goal. They never call themselves failure! They
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really
subscribe to the
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idea
that the greatest accomplishment is not in falling down
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but
in rising again and again after falling
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hard
which sets the stage for
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success
. With regard to the issue of
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gaining
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success
, they
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really
believe that winners never quit and quitters never win.

On the other hand
,
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just
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hard
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work
without believing in ourselves and certain talents does not serve to achieve
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success
. What is in our mind and how
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positive
we
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think
prepares the ground for physical action and
eventually
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gives
rise to
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hard
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work
and
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gaining
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success
. If we believe that we can achieve to whatever we
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want and
we remove the
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negative
thoughts which serve as mental barriers, we
certainly
succeed in
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gaining
our goals. Having purpose is
also
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important
to
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work
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hard
. If we know what we
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really
want and why we need it clarifies our purpose which has beneficial effects on
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hard working
.
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,
besides
being
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hard working
person it is essential to be
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hard
planning person too.

In my view, I
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really
concede that
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success
is 10 percent talent and 90 percent
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hard
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work
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hard
.
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Hard
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work
and self-disciplined perform a pivotal role in
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gaining
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success
, having a purpose and believe in ourselves are
also
required along with the
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hard
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work
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that success is ‘10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work’. Is hard work the key to success, or is talent also important? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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