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It is necessary to parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up Do u agree or disagree v.1

It is necessary to parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up Do u agree or disagree v. 1
Awareness regarding the context makes people take prevention steps. This will create a mooted issue. However, some people perceive that change in the atmosphere affects the flora and fauna while; others think that another factor such as the greenhouse effect and air pollution must be managed. The essay will discuss above both notions with supporting arguments in following paragraphs. To begin with, in the former view many people give more concern to the plants and mammals as their quantity must be balanced. Because if their number varies than entire ecosystem get a collapse. As this specifies are an important parameter to manage the human life cycle. Although, some of the insect would affect human health, some are required to balance the food chain. Moreover, with the growth of population, there has been a large demand of the crops. This will also suffer as diversity in the atmosphere affect most of the crops. For example, in India many people are using wheat as well as vegetables in their diet; this would not only be resulting demand of more crops, but for their nurturing needs good atmosphere also. Thus, this living entity also affects the entire human life cycle. On the other hand, in the latter view, some people give priority to the other attributes comes as per change in the atmosphere. The first issue is that it would generate the greenhouse effect as temperature of the most of the urban area are increased due to the traffic, pollution. This will also result in the least amount of rain ultimately affect the entire ecosystem. The other hurdle is that pollution in the air, which would be generated by many electronic gadgets and by the vehicles; this will release the carbon dioxide in the air which affects the human body. For instance, many metropolitans are suffering from the dispute of air pollution generated by the industrialization, deforestation and vehicles. Thus, this parameter must be well measured to preserve the living entity in the universe. In conclusion, as per my opinion, the former view is required to manage food chain and in the latter view, manage the issue which provide serves the habitat in which they leave. So, both are crucial. The government should take prevention steps to manage this.
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perceive that
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change
in the
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atmosphere
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affects
the flora and fauna while; others
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think
that another factor such as the greenhouse effect and
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air
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pollution
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must
be managed
. The essay will discuss above both notions with supporting arguments in following paragraphs.

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with, in the former
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view
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many
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people
give more concern to the plants and mammals as their quantity
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must
be balanced
.
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a collapse.
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parameter to
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the
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human
life cycle. Although,
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insect would
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human
health,
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are required
to balance the food chain.
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, with the growth of population, there has been a large demand of the crops. This will
also
suffer as diversity in the
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atmosphere
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affect
most of the crops.
For example
, in India
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many
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people
are using wheat
as well
as vegetables in their diet; this would not
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be resulting demand of more crops,
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for their nurturing needs
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good
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also
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the entire
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human
life cycle.

On the
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hand, in the latter
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,
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people
give priority to the
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other
attributes
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as per
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change
in the
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atmosphere
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first
issue is that it would generate the greenhouse effect as temperature of the most of the urban area
are increased
due to the traffic,
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pollution
. This will
also
result in the least amount of rain
ultimately
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affect
the entire ecosystem. The
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hurdle is that
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pollution
in the
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air
, which would
be generated
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many
electronic gadgets and by the vehicles; this will release the carbon dioxide in the
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air
which
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affects
the
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human
body.
For instance
,
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many
metropolitans are suffering from the dispute of
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air
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pollution
generated by the industrialization, deforestation and vehicles.
Thus
, this parameter
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must
be well measured to preserve the living entity in the universe.

In conclusion
, as per my opinion, the former
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view
is required
to
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manage
food chain and in the latter
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view
,
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manage
the issue which provide serves the habitat in which they
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leave
.
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, both are crucial. The
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government
should take prevention steps to
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manage
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IELTS essay It is necessary to parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up Do u agree or disagree v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
376 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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