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It is more important to read and watch news presented by people whose opinion is different from your own view than by people whose opinion are similar to yours. v.2

It is more important to read and watch news presented by people whose opinion is different from your own view than by people whose opinion are similar to yours. v. 2
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human’s modern society and galloping rate of science and technology, more and more people tend to keep abreast of daily events. Actually, there are unlimited ways to get aware of news such as the internet, radio, and television. Although some people adhere to this belief that it is better watching news presented by people with similar perspective, I would prefer being exposed to the news with distinctive viewpoints since it broadens knowledge and develops critical thinking skill. The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to be exposed news with a distinctive opinion is expanding their horizon. In fact, one of the rigors of modern hectic life is that people need to acquire a vast range of proper information to make rational and immediate decisions for having promising future, so without shadow of doubt they should listen or watch the news which is opposite to their perspective. Not only does distinctive news open a new window to people’s mind, but also it inspires them to assess the accuracy of their beliefs. Take a case of a person who has positive opinions about one of the president candidates and make the decision to vote him for instance. Actually, hearing negative opinions about his favorite candidate motivates him to gain more information about him from trustworthy sources and analyze them in order to make the best choice. A further more subtle point is that improving critical thinking skills is another remarkable benefit of hearing news which is completely different with our perspectives. As a matter of fact, people’s attitudes toward lifestyle, societies’ rules and so forth are significantly different from person to person; therefore if they cannot listen to opposite beliefs patiently, they will run into a huge problem and have trouble in socializing with other people easily. To illustrate more, consider a person who cannot tolerate distinctive opinions. This person neither can convey his valuable information nor get persuaded by other people with different ideas. Hardly does he spend time and share ideas; so he little by little can fortify his critical thinking by being imposed opposite news. He allocates his time to a person with a different idea to elaborate his ideas and then think about them preciously. Finally, he feels satisfied with his behavior On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear (obvious) that a person can expand his knowledge and strengthen his critical thinking by being exposed opposite news and beliefs. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that a person who has stubborn personality can make progress in his life. In fact, how people who suffer lack of patience can expand their knowledge and fortify their critical thinking? Undoubtedly, answer of this question is being exposed news with distinctive perspective.
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century, with the development of human’s modern society and galloping rate of science and technology, more and more
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people
tend to
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keep
abreast of daily
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events
. Actually, there
are unlimited
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get
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news
such as the internet, radio, and television. Although
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some
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people
adhere to this
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belief
that it is better watching
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news
presented by
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people
with similar
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perspective
, I would prefer being
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exposed
to the
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news
with
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distinctive
viewpoints since it broadens knowledge and develops
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critical
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thinking
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skill
.

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first
aspect to point out is that what provokes
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people
to be
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exposed
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news
with a
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distinctive
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opinion
is expanding their horizon. In
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fact
, one of the rigors of modern hectic life is that
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people
need to acquire a vast range of proper information to
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make
rational and immediate decisions for having promising future,
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so
without shadow of doubt they should listen or
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watch
the
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news
which is
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opposite
to their
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perspective
. Not
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only
does
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distinctive
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open a
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new
window to
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people’s
mind,
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also
it inspires them to assess the accuracy of their
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beliefs
. Take a case of a
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person
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who
has
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positive
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opinions
about one of the president candidates and
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make
the decision to vote him
for instance
. Actually, hearing
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negative
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opinions
about his favorite candidate motivates him to gain more information about him from trustworthy sources and analyze them in order to
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make
the best choice.

A
further
more subtle point is that improving
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critical
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thinking
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skills
is another remarkable benefit of hearing
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news
which is completely
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different
with our
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perspectives
. As a matter of
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fact
,
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people’s
attitudes toward lifestyle, societies’
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rules
and
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so
forth are
significantly
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different
from
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person
to
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person
;
therefore
if they cannot listen to
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beliefs
patiently
, they will run into a huge problem and have trouble in socializing with other
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people
easily
. To illustrate more, consider a
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person
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who
cannot tolerate
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distinctive
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opinions
. This
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person
neither can convey his valuable information nor
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get
persuaded by other
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people
with
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ideas
. Hardly does he spend time and share
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;
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he
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can fortify his
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thinking
by
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news
. He allocates his time to a
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person
with a
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different
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idea
to elaborate his
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ideas
and then
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think
about them
preciously
.
Finally
, he feels satisfied with his behavior

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, it is crystal-
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clear
(obvious) that a
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person
can expand his knowledge and strengthen his
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critical
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thinking
by being
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exposed
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opposite
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news
and
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beliefs
. It is high time we
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stopped
overlooking the
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that a
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person
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who
has stubborn personality can
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make
progress in his life. In
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fact
, how
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people
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who
suffer lack of patience can expand their knowledge and fortify their
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critical
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thinking
?
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, answer of this question is being
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exposed
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news
with
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distinctive
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perspective
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
85Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is more important to read and watch news presented by people whose opinion is different from your own view than by people whose opinion are similar to yours. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
474 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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