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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. v. 1
It is the requirement of every individual to share his emotions. Many believe that the presence of the family should be considered superior to the friends as they can also play the part of a friend. I completely disagree with this statement, because friend can play a greater role in every aspect of life. The family members such as the siblings, they grow with us. Therefore, they possess the knowledge of our every single habit. They can improvise our lifestyle by pointing out negativities in our character. As an illustration, my mother motivated me to stop using abusive language while talking to the strangers. Her positive attitude helped me to quit this dangerous and unethical activity. Hence, the role of the family is crucial in our life. Although the family members possess a significant importance in our life, the role of friends is irreplaceable. Friends can be a source of huge support in your critical time. Parents can abandon their children when they are grown up, but the relationship with friends can last longer. The close connection with a friend is a motivation to achieve your goals. For instance, I cleared the IELTS exam after the third attempt, with the help of the encouragement that my friend provided. Furthermore, friends can also provide the financial assistance, without disturbing our privacy. For example, I borrowed a significant amount of money to pay the fee of my upcoming examination. My friend did not share this news with anyone. Hence, friends play a successful role in our lives, as they are a source of financial and emotional support. To conclude, many consider that a person must have a better family rather than friends, because they can compensate for a friend as well. However, I completely disagree with this statement, the roles of friend in our lives is undeniable.
It is the requirement of every individual to share his emotions.
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Many
believe that the presence of the
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family
should
be considered
superior to the
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friends
as they can
also
play the part of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
. I completely disagree with this statement,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
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friend
can play a greater
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role
in every aspect of life.

The
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family
members such as the siblings, they grow with us.
Therefore
, they possess the knowledge of our every single habit. They can improvise our lifestyle by pointing out negativities in our character. As an illustration, my mother motivated me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
using abusive language while talking to the strangers. Her
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
attitude
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helped
me to quit this
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dangerous
and unethical activity.
Hence
, the
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role
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
is crucial in our life.

Although the
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family
members possess a significant importance in our life, the
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role
of
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friends
is irreplaceable.
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Friends
can be a source of huge support in your critical time. Parents can abandon their children when they
are grown
up,
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but
the relationship with
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friends
can last longer. The close connection with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
is a motivation to achieve your goals.
For instance
, I cleared the IELTS exam after the third attempt, with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the encouragement that my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
provided.
Furthermore
,
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friends
can
also
provide the financial assistance, without disturbing our privacy.
For example
, I borrowed a significant amount of money to pay the fee of my upcoming examination. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
did not share this news with anyone.
Hence
,
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friends
play a successful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
role
in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
, as they are a source of financial and emotional support.

To conclude
,
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many
consider that a person
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must
have a better
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family
rather
than
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friends
,
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because
they can compensate for a
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friend
as well
.
However
, I completely disagree with this statement, the
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roles
of
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friend
in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
is undeniable.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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