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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.8

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? v. 8
People’s brain learns more in their childhood compared to the entire age. More significant for children is to get the knowledge of true and false in their childhood. I think, sometimes punishment is help to learn more about self, while children became disobedient if they punished regularly. Some people punish children because of their betterment. While children do repetitive mistakes, parents punish their children for a learning lesson. For example, if children do not complete homework regularly, then they finish the homework after some punishment because they know how the homework is important for their life. Children think themselves is important in a future life, so sometimes punishment help to think about themselves. To illustrates, most children thought about mistakes after punishment, this might be beneficial for children to think about which way is helpful in my future. So, parents scolded that children to avoid repetition and self-thinking. On the other hand, some bad impact on children because of more punishment in childhood. Children's confidence is low when they penalize each and every guilt. The children do not identify the difference between the right or wrong decisions, who have not confident about their ideas. Children do not respect the other decisions if they scolded more time. For example, students disobey the teacher’s instructions, when they insult regularly in class. Thus, many bad impacts of regular punishment on children’s future life. In conclusion, the identification of activities is important in childhood. Little punishment is helpful to think independently and avoid repetition. However, children do not obey decisions, which are wrong for them, due to regular punishment.
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of their betterment. While
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do repetitive mistakes, parents punish their
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children
for a learning lesson.
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, if
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children
do not complete homework
regularly
, then they finish the homework after
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about which way is helpful in my future.
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, parents scolded that
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to avoid repetition and self-thinking.

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in childhood. Children's confidence is low when they penalize each and every guilt. The
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do not identify the difference between the right or
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decisions, who have not confident about their
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.
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do not respect the other decisions if they scolded more time.
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future life.

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, the identification of activities is
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in childhood.
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is helpful to
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and avoid repetition.
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do not obey decisions, which are
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for them, due to regular
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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