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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 1
The crime is a critical problem in the current society and has to take lawful actions to make a peaceful environment for all people. Few people believe that the death penalty should be enacted for those who have done unacceptable violent crimes while others state that these punishments cannot be accepted in contemporary society. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of the death penalty and I am in the opinion that the government has to introduce necessary methods to prevent the crimes and the death penalty is not a punishment. The major advantage of the death penalty is people being reluctant to perform any sort of crime as a result of deadly punishments. In other words, when the laws are powerful and criminals have to pay for their crimes by their lives makes them rethink their actions since anybody is love themselves. For instance, the statistics state that the percentage of total crimes that occurred before discontinuing the death penalty in Sri Lanka was considerably low. On the other hand, the significant disadvantage is innocent people can be punished as a result of loopholes in the law and the inability to prove their accuracy because of poverty or low income. Similarly, the lack of evidence to demonstrate the truth of crimes also lead to inaccurate court decisions. For example, an honest person will be paid from his/her life to a crime that he/she did not commit as a result of a lack of evidence. In summary, the death penalty has its own ups and downs such as people will be self-behave and innocent people pay the price. Therefore, first of all. the law has to be empowered and reevaluate to close the loopholes to make justice to the society. Moreover, the government can initiate programs like the development of the child's mind not to get involved in crimes with or without knowingly, promote medication and organize awareness and rehabilitation programs to reduce the crime gradually. Then there will not be a necessity to enact the death penalty.
The
crime
is a critical problem in the
current
society and
has to
take lawful actions to
make
a peaceful environment for all
people
. Few
people
believe that the death
penalty
should
be enacted
for those who have done unacceptable violent
crimes
while others state that these punishments cannot be
accepted
in contemporary society. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of the death
penalty and
I am in the opinion that the
government
has to
introduce necessary methods to
prevent
the
crimes
and the death
penalty
is not a punishment.

The major advantage of the death
penalty
is
people
being reluctant to perform any sort of
crime
as a result
of deadly punishments.
In other words
, when the laws are powerful and criminals
have to
pay for their
crimes
by their
lives
makes
them rethink their actions since anybody is
love
themselves.
For instance
, the statistics state that the percentage of total
crimes
that occurred
before
discontinuing the death
penalty
in Sri Lanka was
considerably
low.

On the other hand
, the significant disadvantage is innocent
people
can
be punished
as a result
of loopholes in the law and the inability to prove their accuracy
because
of poverty or low income.
Similarly
, the lack of evidence to demonstrate the truth of
crimes
also
lead to inaccurate court decisions.
For example
, an honest person will
be paid
from his/her life to a
crime
that he/she did not commit
as a result
of a lack of evidence.

In summary, the death
penalty
has its
own
ups and downs such as
people
will be self-behave and innocent
people
pay the price.
Therefore
,
first of all
.
the
law
has to
be empowered
and reevaluate to close the loopholes to
make
justice to the society.
Moreover
, the
government
can initiate programs like the development of the child's mind not to
get
involved in
crimes
with or without
knowingly
, promote medication and organize awareness and rehabilitation programs to
reduce
the
crime
gradually
. Then there will not be a necessity to enact the death
penalty
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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