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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 1
The crime is a critical problem in the current society and has to take lawful actions to make a peaceful environment for all people. Few people believe that the death penalty should be enacted for those who have done unacceptable violent crimes while others state that these punishments cannot be accepted in contemporary society. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of the death penalty and I am in the opinion that the government has to introduce necessary methods to prevent the crimes and the death penalty is not a punishment. The major advantage of the death penalty is people being reluctant to perform any sort of crime as a result of deadly punishments. In other words, when the laws are powerful and criminals have to pay for their crimes by their lives makes them rethink their actions since anybody is love themselves. For instance, the statistics state that the percentage of total crimes that occurred before discontinuing the death penalty in Sri Lanka was considerably low. On the other hand, the significant disadvantage is innocent people can be punished as a result of loopholes in the law and the inability to prove their accuracy because of poverty or low income. Similarly, the lack of evidence to demonstrate the truth of crimes also lead to inaccurate court decisions. For example, an honest person will be paid from his/her life to a crime that he/she did not commit as a result of a lack of evidence. In summary, the death penalty has its own ups and downs such as people will be self-behave and innocent people pay the price. Therefore, first of all. the law has to be empowered and reevaluate to close the loopholes to make justice to the society. Moreover, the government can initiate programs like the development of the child's mind not to get involved in crimes with or without knowingly, promote medication and organize awareness and rehabilitation programs to reduce the crime gradually. Then there will not be a necessity to enact the death penalty.
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crime
is a critical problem in the
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current
society and
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has to
take lawful actions to
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make
a peaceful environment for all
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people
. Few
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people
believe that the death
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penalty
should
be enacted
for those who have done unacceptable violent
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crimes
while others state that these punishments cannot be
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accepted
in contemporary society. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of the death
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penalty and
I am in the opinion that the
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government
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has to
introduce necessary methods to
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prevent
the
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crimes
and the death
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penalty
is not a punishment.

The major advantage of the death
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penalty
is
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people
being reluctant to perform any sort of
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crime
as a result
of deadly punishments.
In other words
, when the laws are powerful and criminals
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have to
pay for their
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crimes
by their
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lives
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makes
them rethink their actions since anybody is
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love
themselves.
For instance
, the statistics state that the percentage of total
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crimes
that occurred
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before
discontinuing the death
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penalty
in Sri Lanka was
considerably
low.

On the other hand
, the significant disadvantage is innocent
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people
can
be punished
as a result
of loopholes in the law and the inability to prove their accuracy
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because
of poverty or low income.
Similarly
, the lack of evidence to demonstrate the truth of
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crimes
also
lead to inaccurate court decisions.
For example
, an honest person will
be paid
from his/her life to a
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crime
that he/she did not commit
as a result
of a lack of evidence.

In summary, the death
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penalty
has its
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own
ups and downs such as
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people
will be self-behave and innocent
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people
pay the price.
Therefore
,
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first of all
.
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the
law
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has to
be empowered
and reevaluate to close the loopholes to
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make
justice to the society.
Moreover
, the
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government
can initiate programs like the development of the child's mind not to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in
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crimes
with or without
knowingly
, promote medication and organize awareness and rehabilitation programs to
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reduce
the
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crime
gradually
. Then there will not be a necessity to enact the death
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penalty
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6
Overall Band Score
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