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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and v.41

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and v. 41
IT IS OFTEN BELIEVED BY SOME FOLKS THAT THERE IS NO USE OF SPENDING MONEY ON THE ARTS BY THE AUTHORITIY. BUT THAT MONEY SHOULD SPEND ON SUCH THINGS WHICH MAKE THE NATION STRONG AND HEALTHY SUCH AS EDUCTAION, ARMY. , HEALTH FIELD. I NEITHER CONCURE NOR DIFFER WITH THE ABOVE NOTION DUE TO MYRID OF REASONS. THIS EASSY WILL DISCUSSES WHY IT IS NOT USELESS TO SPEND MONEY ON CREATIVE ACTIVITIES AND AT THE SAME POINT HOW OTHER FACTORS ARE ALSO NOT BE NEGLATED. TO START WITH, FIRST AND FOR MOST WHY IT IS NOT WASTING CURRANCY ON ART BECAUSE OF SEVERAL REASONS. TO ELABORATE, GOVERNMENT ALSO RISES MONEY FROM SUPPORTING SUCH ARTS EVENTS LIKE CRAFT EXHIBITION, TRADITIONAL DANCE SHOWS, PAINTINGS GALLORY ETC. FOR AN INSTANCE ON OF MY FRIEND IS A VERY FAMOUSE PAINTER AND SHE ORGANISED EXHIBITON IN SUBURB AREA WHERE LOT OF YOUNGSTERS CAME. THIS WAS FUNDED BY THE LOCAL MINICIPAL AUTHORITY, SO THEY HAVE SELL THE TICKETS FOR THAT GALLORY SHOW, THUS THEY ALSO HAD AN INCOME FROM IT. SECONDALY, IT IS BECOMING CRUCIAL TO PRESERV THE ANCIENT ARTS BY MEANS OF OPENING MUSEUMS AND FOR THIS GOVERNMENT SHOULD ESTABLISH SOME ORGANIZATION TO LOOK AFTER IT. TO EXPAND IN DETAILS, MANY PEOPLE HAVE A HOBBY TO EXPLORE IT SO IF THEY KNOW WE SUCH KIND OF PLACE THEN THEY WILL COME TO OUR TERETORY TO SEE. BY TOURISM INDUSRTY WILL BE BENEFITED. IF TOURISM GETS PROFITS AUTOMATICALLY THE GOVERNMENT GETS TOO. HOWEVER, THIS WILL EITHER DISTRACT PRESENT GENERATION IN EDUCATION SECTOR OR THIS MAY AFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT. ON THE OTHER SIDE, GOVERNMEN ALSO LOOK AFTER THE HEALTH SECTORS, EDUCATIONS, ARMY PEOPLE. BRIEFLY, MOST IMPORTANT IS THE HEALTH SECTOR, WHERE A LOT OF PEOPLE ARE SUFFERING FROM DANGEROUS DISEASES LIKE CANCER, DIABITIS, SERIOUS LUNGS PROBLEM ETC BUT THE TREATMENTS ASSOCIATED WITH THIS ARE HIGHLY EXPENSIVE, SO GOVERNMENT ALSO DO SOME FINDING TO PART THE TREATMENT COST. MOREOVER, ARMY IS PROTECTING OUR COUNTRY BY GIVING THEIR WHOLE TIME AND EDICATION BUT THEY ARE GETTING LOW PAY WHICH IS NOT FAIR. SO GOVERNMENT ALSO SHOULD SPEND SOME MONEY BY BEING HELPING HAND FOR THEIR FAMILY. TO SUM UP, GOVERNMENT SHOULD LOOK EVERY SECTORS AS EQUAL, AND THEY SHOULD SPEND MONEY ON THE FIELDS WHICH NEED FIRST PRIORITY, THIS DOES NOT MEANS THAT SPENDING MONEY ON ARTS IS WORTHLESS OR GOVERNMENT IS NOT SUPPORTING OTHER SECTORS.
IT IS
OFTEN
BELIEVED BY
SOME
FOLKS THAT THERE IS NO
USE
OF SPENDING
MONEY
ON THE
ARTS
BY THE
AUTHORITIY
.
BUT
THAT
MONEY
SHOULD
SPEND
ON SUCH THINGS WHICH
MAKE
THE NATION STRONG AND HEALTHY SUCH AS
EDUCTAION
, ARMY.
,
HEALTH FIELD. I NEITHER
CONCURE
NOR DIFFER WITH THE ABOVE NOTION DUE TO
MYRID
OF REASONS. THIS
EASSY
WILL
DISCUSSES
WHY IT IS NOT USELESS TO
SPEND
MONEY
ON CREATIVE ACTIVITIES AND AT THE SAME POINT HOW OTHER FACTORS ARE
ALSO
NOT BE
NEGLATED
.

TO
START
WITH,
FIRST
AND FOR MOST WHY IT IS NOT WASTING
CURRANCY
ON
ART
BECAUSE
OF SEVERAL REASONS. TO ELABORATE,
GOVERNMENT
ALSO
RISES
MONEY
FROM SUPPORTING SUCH
ARTS
EVENTS
LIKE CRAFT EXHIBITION, TRADITIONAL DANCE
SHOWS
, PAINTINGS
GALLORY
ETC. FOR AN INSTANCE ON OF MY FRIEND IS A
VERY
FAMOUSE
PAINTER AND SHE
ORGANISED
EXHIBITON
IN SUBURB AREA WHERE LOT OF YOUNGSTERS CAME. THIS
WAS FUNDED
BY THE LOCAL
MINICIPAL
AUTHORITY,
SO
THEY HAVE
SELL
THE TICKETS FOR THAT
GALLORY
SHOW
,
THUS
THEY
ALSO
HAD AN INCOME FROM IT.

SECONDALY
, IT IS BECOMING CRUCIAL TO
PRESERV
THE ANCIENT
ARTS
BY MEANS OF OPENING MUSEUMS AND FOR THIS
GOVERNMENT
SHOULD ESTABLISH
SOME
ORGANIZATION TO LOOK AFTER IT. TO EXPAND IN
DETAILS
,
MANY
PEOPLE
HAVE A HOBBY TO EXPLORE IT
SO
IF THEY KNOW WE SUCH KIND OF PLACE THEN THEY WILL
COME
TO OUR
TERETORY
TO
SEE
. BY TOURISM
INDUSRTY
WILL
BE BENEFITED
. IF TOURISM
GETS
PROFITS
AUTOMATICALLY
THE
GOVERNMENT
GETS
TOO.
HOWEVER
, THIS WILL EITHER DISTRACT PRESENT GENERATION IN EDUCATION
SECTOR
OR THIS MAY AFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT.

ON THE OTHER SIDE,
GOVERNMEN
ALSO
LOOK AFTER THE HEALTH
SECTORS
, EDUCATIONS, ARMY
PEOPLE
.
BRIEFLY
, MOST
IMPORTANT
IS THE HEALTH
SECTOR
, WHERE
A LOT OF
PEOPLE
ARE SUFFERING FROM
DANGEROUS
DISEASES LIKE CANCER,
DIABITIS
, SERIOUS LUNGS PROBLEM ETC
BUT
THE TREATMENTS ASSOCIATED WITH THIS ARE
HIGHLY
EXPENSIVE,
SO
GOVERNMENT
ALSO
DO
SOME
FINDING TO PART THE TREATMENT COST.
MOREOVER
, ARMY IS PROTECTING OUR COUNTRY BY GIVING THEIR WHOLE TIME AND
EDICATION
BUT
THEY ARE GETTING LOW PAY WHICH IS NOT
FAIR
.
SO
GOVERNMENT
ALSO
SHOULD
SPEND
SOME
MONEY
BY BEING HELPING HAND FOR THEIR FAMILY.

TO SUM UP,
GOVERNMENT
SHOULD LOOK EVERY
SECTORS
AS EQUAL, AND THEY SHOULD
SPEND
MONEY
ON THE FIELDS WHICH NEED
FIRST
PRIORITY, THIS DOES NOT
MEANS
THAT SPENDING
MONEY
ON
ARTS
IS WORTHLESS OR
GOVERNMENT
IS NOT SUPPORTING OTHER
SECTORS
.
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and v. 41

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