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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.26

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? v. 26
Children must learn about right and wrong behaviour from childhood. Some people think that punishment is the best way to make them do the right thing. I do not agree that disciplinary action is a good method of teaching them this distinction. First of all, punishment can negatively affect the feelings of the child. Parents need to be more forgiving, because little kids do not understand anything. For example, if a baby breaks a mug, parents should not punish him physically, they should be told that next time he should be careful. Also, if he uttered a censored word, parents are best advised to explain to them that it is wrong to use these words really help them understand that such behaviour is wrong. Secondly, the best way to teach youth to distinguish right from wrong is to show them a good example. They should do what they think is proper, behave as they would like their child to behave. Children should be taught to say "thank you", "please" and "sorry" in appropriate situations. They also need to be taught to pick up the trash they have dropped or apologize to someone they have offended. In conclusion, it is crucial for the children to learn about right and wrong at a young age. Parents have a major role in educating children of a good behaviour.
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learn about
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right
and
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wrong
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behaviour
from childhood.
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people
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think
that punishment is the best way to
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make
them do the
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right
thing. I do not
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agree
that disciplinary action is a
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good
method of teaching them this distinction.

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First of all
, punishment can
negatively
affect the feelings of the child.
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Parents
need to be more forgiving,
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because
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little
kids do not understand anything.
For example
, if a baby breaks a mug,
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parents
should not punish him
physically
, they should be
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told
that
next
time he should be careful.
Also
, if he uttered a censored word,
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parents
are best advised to
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explain
to them that it is
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wrong
to
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use
these words
really
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help
them understand that such
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behaviour
is
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wrong
.

Secondly
, the best way to teach youth to distinguish
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right
from
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wrong
is to
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show
them a
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good
example. They should do what they
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think
is proper, behave as they would like their child to behave.
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Children
should
be taught
to say
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thank you
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,
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"
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please
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and
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sorry
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in appropriate situations. They
also
need to
be taught
to pick up the trash they have dropped or apologize to someone they have offended.

In conclusion
, it is crucial for the
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children
to learn about
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right
and
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wrong
at a young age.
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Parents
have a major role in educating
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children
of a
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good
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behaviour
.
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10Mistakes

IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
225 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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