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it is generally believed that success in fields such as arts and sports can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, its sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a good sports person or artist. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

it is generally believed that success in fields such as arts and sports can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, its sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a good sports person or artist. v. 1
It is a universally acceptable idea that only individuals who are naturally gifted in the path of art and sport can achieve excellence, although some are of the opinion that a child can be tutored to excel in this field In my opinion, talent has a role to play in becoming a great artist, nevertheless factors such as discipline, interest, and practice can make even a non talented child achieve greater heights It's a fact that inborn gift has a role to play in climbing the ladder of excellence, particularly in areas of sports. However, innate ability without proper guidance, constant practice and correction cannot guarantee success, as such, all factors should be put into consideration in an outstanding performance. For instance, my cousin had a natural ability to play the guitar since age 4, he took lessons and underwent a series of training prior to a national competition he recently won in Ghana. Thus, in order to climb the ladder of success, a collaboration of talent and hard work must be considered. On the other hand, a child with no natural incline, who is properly learnt in music or games has a very high chance at becoming great. Though, there must be a high threshold of interest and love in order to withstand any challenge that may arise. For example, my little niece who loves ballet spend a lot of time practicing and she's great at it, as she recently won the gold prize for a competition held two weeks ago. In conclusion, talent is of utmost importance, but in itself cannot guarantee excellent results as compared to a non gifted child who is likely to be greater due to the interest, self denial and quantity of hard work put together. In my opinion, innate ability should be collaborated with interest and effectiveness.
It is a
universally
acceptable
idea
that
only
individuals
who
are
naturally
gifted in the path of art and sport can achieve excellence, although
some
are of the opinion that a
child
can
be tutored
to excel in this field

In my opinion, talent has a role to play in becoming a great artist,
nevertheless
factors such as discipline,
interest
, and practice can
make
even a
non talented
child
achieve greater heights

It's a fact that inborn gift has a role to play in climbing the ladder of excellence,
particularly
in areas of sports.
However
, innate ability without proper guidance, constant practice and correction cannot guarantee success, as such, all factors should
be put
into consideration in an outstanding performance.
For instance
, my cousin had a natural ability to play the guitar since age 4, he took lessons and underwent a series of training prior to a national competition he recently won in Ghana.
Thus
, in order to climb the ladder of success, a collaboration of talent and
hard
work
must
be considered
.

On the other hand
, a
child
with no natural incline,
who
is
properly
learnt
in music or games has a
very
high chance at becoming great. Though, there
must
be a high threshold of
interest
and
love
in order to withstand any challenge that may arise.
For example
, my
little
niece
who
loves
ballet spend
a lot of
time
practicing and
she's great at it, as she recently won the gold prize for a competition held two weeks ago.

In conclusion
, talent is of utmost importance,
but
in itself cannot guarantee excellent results as compared to a
non gifted
child
who
is likely to be greater due to the
interest
,
self denial
and quantity of
hard
work put together.

In my opinion, innate ability should
be collaborated
with
interest
and effectiveness.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay it is generally believed that success in fields such as arts and sports can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, its sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a good sports person or artist. v. 1

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