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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.9

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 9
Some people perceive that many children born with some gift of art such as better voice and fit body. Due to this they become a good musician or sports player. However, others think the kids who, having no skills can learn a particular skill and get an excellence. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant reason for a child born with the inbuilt capability is a gift from god. As a person is able to do perform that activity better than any other else. Moreover, they can also enhance their knowledge by doing continuous practise. Although the juvenile having the capability, no one can reach to their level if they do the practice still not possible. Because some basic skills were needed for, and which comes by born. For example, the child having a good voice can become a good singer; this not possible by learning as quality of voice is needed. On the other hand, others think that the juvenile who, having no skills can learn this and get excellence in that. The first reason is that person can acquire the knowledge by giving their focus. This will help them to nurture any new skills. Furthermore, another reason is that after getting skills one should practice that thing which help them to mould their body. However, sometimes they can also reach to the level of a person who having inbuilt skills. For instance, the younger one can learn a cricket by giving dedication and hard work; become a good sports person in the future. In conclusion, as per my opinion, the kids who, having an inbuilt skill in a certain area, such as voice can excel better than one who learn it. But some skills can be learned by doing practise of it without having primary skills.
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children born with
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voice
and fit body. Due to this they become a
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good
musician or sports player.
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, others
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the kids
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can
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learn
a particular
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skill
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an excellence. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs.

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with, the predominant reason for a child born with the inbuilt capability is a gift from god.
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As
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is able to do perform that activity better than any
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else.
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also
enhance their knowledge by doing continuous
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the capability, no one can reach to their level if they do the practice
still
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can become a
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singer; this not possible by learning as quality of
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is needed
.

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hand, others
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that the juvenile
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this and
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excellence in that. The
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can acquire the knowledge by giving their focus. This will
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help
them to nurture any new
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.
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, another reason is that after getting
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one should practice that thing which
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them to
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their body.
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they can
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reach to the level of a
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person
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inbuilt
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.
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, the younger one can
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a cricket by giving dedication and
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work; become a
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good
sports
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person
in the future.

In conclusion
, as per my opinion, the kids
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,
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having
an inbuilt
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in a certain area, such as
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voice
can excel better than one
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who
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learn
it.
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of it without
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primary
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skills
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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