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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 5
It is true that not all people are born with a gift. Sometimes, God gives us an opportunity to make our own talent. Before a legendary basketball player was born, he has been just a student who is practicing basketball on the school's court. For example, Michael Jordan, he was once a loser and make a lot of bruises, wounds and mistakes. All the negative comments that people throw at him, he makes this as an inspiration to succeed. Now, he was one of the best basketball player of his generation. Another example is Lady Gaga. She was born in a musical family. At a very young age, she started to play piano and bit by bit, she became good at it and improved to the next level which is writing songs. Despite of this, she was bullied at school because according to other people, "she looks like a slut". At the age of 16 years old, Lady Gaga was raped and had a depression for a long time. Slowly, she's becoming famous because people now recognize her talent, but she's not happy so she started to say no to advertisements or commercials she doesn't like. By this, she becomes a better version of herself and overcame her depression as well. These two amazing persons are one of the examples of people born with a gift and people born without the skill. Talent can be learned, even though you are born with it and you didn't do anything to improve it, it is useless. We are creating our own future in life, not what other people want from us.
It is true that not all
people
are born
with a gift.
Sometimes
, God gives us an opportunity to
make
our
own
talent.

Before
a legendary basketball player
was born
, he has been
just
a student who is practicing basketball on the school's court.
For example
, Michael Jordan, he was once a loser and
make
a lot of
bruises, wounds and mistakes. All the
negative
comments that
people
throw at him, he
makes
this as an inspiration to succeed.
Now
, he was one of the best basketball player of his generation.

Another example is Lady Gaga. She
was born
in a musical family. At a
very
young age, she
started
to play piano and bit by bit, she became
good
at it and
improved
to the
next
level which is writing songs.
Despite of
this, she
was bullied
at school
because
according to other
people
,
"
she looks like a slut
"
. At the age of 16 years
old
, Lady Gaga
was raped
and had a depression for a long time.
Slowly
, she's becoming
famous
because
people
now
recognize her talent,
but
she's not happy
so
she
started
to say no to advertisements or commercials she doesn't like. By this, she becomes a better version of herself and overcame her depression
as well
.

These two amazing persons are one of the examples of
people
born with a gift and
people
born without the
skill
. Talent can
be learned
,
even though
you
are born
with it and you didn't do anything to
improve
it, it is useless. We are creating our
own
future in life, not what other
people
want from us.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 5

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