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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.6

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 6
It is true that not all people are born with a gift. Sometimes, God gives us an opportunity to make our own talent. According to my view, I think that all the people were born with their hidden qualities. The only thing is that he/she has to show that value to the people. Every sportsman and every musician were full of their quality at the time of their birth. They only develop their skills and they become famous. If we talk about sportsman Mr. MS Dhoni, who was him. He was interested in cricket in his childhood. He started playing cricket at the age of 9 and after that he becomes famous in the worldwide. He was taught to become a business man, but he was not ready for that because his interest was in his hidden quality. So this is highly agreed that everyone took place here with hidden gift. As per the other view, the education is only for their future. Everyone will not take an interest in the same activity. Suppose if you are teaching music to every, in the counting of 100 students there might be some players who will not be interested in music, some will be artists. So this is not necessary that all the students will hear your lecture. They will only listen their favourite topic and just ignore the other one. So, according to my opinion qualities are at birth time in the people. We can only show them the right path that how they can show that worth to the other audience. For example, we can only tell a musician that how to sing and what techniques he/she should follow we cannot sing at his/her side.
It is true that not all
people
are born
with a gift.
Sometimes
, God gives us an opportunity to
make
our
own
talent.

According to my view, I
think
that all the
people
were born
with their hidden
qualities
. The
only
thing is that he/she
has to
show
that value to the
people
. Every sportsman and every musician were full of their
quality
at the time of their birth. They
only
develop their
skills
and they become
famous
.

If we talk about sportsman Mr. MS
Dhoni
, who was him. He
was interested
in cricket in his childhood. He
started
playing cricket at the age of 9 and after that he becomes
famous
in the worldwide.
He
was taught
to become a business
man
,
but
he was not ready for that
because
his interest was in his hidden
quality
.
So
this is
highly
agreed
that everyone took place here with hidden gift.

As per the other view, the education is
only
for their future. Everyone will not take an interest in the same activity.

Suppose if you are teaching music to every, in the counting of 100 students there might be
some
players who will not
be interested
in music,
some
will be artists.
So
this is not necessary that all the students will hear your lecture. They will
only
listen their
favourite
topic and
just
ignore
the other one.

So
, according to my opinion
qualities
are at birth time in the
people
. We can
only
show
them the right path that how they can
show
that worth to the other audience.
For example
, we can
only
tell
a musician that how to sing and what techniques he/she should follow we cannot sing at his/her side.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 6

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285 words
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