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It is generally accepted that smoking causes the deaths of large number of people. In order to address this problem governments should bans smoking in public places. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

It is generally accepted that smoking causes the deaths of large number of people. In order to address this problem governments should bans smoking in public places. v. 2
We live in contemporary modern world, where smoking is considered as a trend to enhance one' s charisma. However, disastrous effects from acitve and passive smoking can not be overlooked. I firmly agree with the statement government should impose stringent rules especially ban or outrageous fine to eradicate the dangerous effect of passive smoking on public. I would like to elaborate my point with following reasons: It is well known fact that passive smoking is considered equally harmful as active smoking. For instance, when a person smoke a cigarette the nicotin exhaled certainly inahled by people surrounding that area, including children. However, nicotin deposition in lungs alveoli causes hardening of cell and thereby reduces elasticity of lungs to expand. This can give rise of symptoms such as troubled breathing, muscle pain, clubbing, cyanosis and interfere in the process of oxygenation. Eventually, chronic exposure to these harmful gases may lead to lung cancer that is most uncurable type of malignant cancer. As a result, to save life of innocent young ones and individuals government should forbid smoking. Another reasons that deserves attention creation of smoking free environment can lead to awakening in youth. It is universal sayng, that amateur adolsecents have higher proclivity to learn from surrounding environment. However, they might not develop habit of smoking and free from deadly dieases. For example, last when week I went to a restaurant named Cheesecake factory, I saw a board of no smoking hanging on a wall. People strictly followed that in order to maintain camaraderie and after realizing about adverse effects, as it also included ill effects cause from smoking. This is certainly initiative step by owner to create healthy atmoshphere for all consumers. Thus, by formulating necessary rules andregulations government can deter people from developing obsession with smoking. In conclusion, government should bann smoking in places such as parks, restaurants, office and other tourist attractions places to plummet the number of people suffering from malignant type of lung cancer
We
live
in contemporary modern world, where
smoking
is considered
as a trend

to
enhance
one&
#039; s charisma.
However
, disastrous effects from
acitve
and passive

smoking
can not
be overlooked
. I
firmly
agree
with the statement
government
should
impose


stringent
rules
especially
ban or outrageous fine to eradicate the
dangerous


effect
of passive
smoking
on public. I would like to elaborate my point
with


following reasons:

It is well known fact that passive
smoking
is considered
equally
harmful as

active
smoking
.
For instance
, when a person
smoke
a cigarette the
nicotin


exhaled
certainly
inahled
by
people
surrounding that area, including children.

However
,
nicotin
deposition in lungs alveoli causes hardening of cell and thereby

reduces
elasticity of lungs to expand. This can give rise of symptoms such
as


troubled
breathing, muscle pain, clubbing, cyanosis and interfere in the process of oxygenation.

Eventually
, chronic exposure to these harmful gases may lead to lung cancer
that is
most

uncurable
type of malignant cancer.
As a result
, to save life of innocent
young


ones
and individuals
government
should forbid smoking.

Another reasons that deserves attention creation of
smoking
free

environment
can lead to awakening in youth. It is universal
sayng
,
that


amateur
adolsecents
have higher proclivity to learn from surrounding

environment
.
However
, they might not develop habit of
smoking
and free from

deadly
dieases
.
For example
, last when week I went to a restaurant named
Cheesecake


factory
, I
saw
a board of no
smoking
hanging on a wall.
People
strictly
followed


that in order to maintain camaraderie and after realizing about adverse effects, as it
also


included
ill effects cause from
smoking
. This is
certainly
initiative step by
owner


to
create healthy
atmoshphere
for all consumers.
Thus
, by formulating necessary

rules
andregulations
government
can deter
people
from developing

obsession
with smoking.

In conclusion
,
government
should
bann
smoking
in places such as parks, restaurants, office and other tourist

attractions places
to plummet the number of
people
suffering from malignant type of

lung cancer
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
37Mistakes

IELTS essay It is generally accepted that smoking causes the deaths of large number of people. In order to address this problem governments should bans smoking in public places. v. 2

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  American English
29 paragraphs
327 words
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