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It is frequently remarked that success is easy to attain but difficult to maintain. v.1

It is frequently remarked that success is easy to attain but difficult to maintain. v. 1
Every human being desires success from his own perspective. Though success in life is a relative term and could vary greatly from person to person, being able to fulfil dreams and ambitions and being able to be recognised among people is a common definition we can attach to the term success. While a sports personality desire success by doing some ground breaking records in his sports, a new actor can dream to perform in a big budget hit movie as his success. When this actor gains some fame, he might desire to win the Oscar prize and can make it his milestone for success. It is often said that success might be easy to gain but more difficult to maintain and I completely agree with this notion. First of all, hard work, determination and talent are required to gain success. If we consider a new employee who might expect to reach the higher ladder of his career and works really hard, he might one day fulfil his dream. But the real challenge is in performing the duties as a senior executive and that’s even harder than reaching this position. A singer, movie actor and sportsman can gain fame and success by showing superb performance once and everybody will then look at them and expect them to perform well continuously. This is not that easy and requires even more hard work to maintain the performance. If we look at the movie industries, it is not uncommon that many new actors and actresses show great potential in their early state of career but can’t reach the position they ought to have due to their lack of hard work and determination. Luck often plays its tricks but if we omit the part played by the luck, it remains hard works, determination and excellent performance which become even harder when someone gains popularity. Second, we all have our short term and long term ambitions and being able to accomplish a goal does not stop us from dreaming even bigger dreams. Being successful for someone does not mean that he can then stop and enjoy his success. It opens new possibilities and responsibilities and to reach the next level, we need to work harder at that stage. Maintaining success means performing excellence all the time which in reality is a very hard to maintain. Third, the definition of success is ever changing even for a single person. A 10 years old child defines his success by achieving excellent grades and it changes as soon as he enters in his career. The successful students then have to work harder to prove his supremacy among other talented workers. Thus when he attains success and reach in a higher position of a company, he then needs to take even bigger responsibilities. A single blunder can then ruin his career and shatter his dream of further success. This keeps on changing and thus success in different states in life varies. Continuous efforts and works are required to maintain success for a person in his life. In conclusion, it is indeed true that maintaining success is far more difficult than achieving it as it requires even more hard works and continuous excellent performance in every field.
Every human being desires
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from his
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own
perspective. Though
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success
in life is a relative
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term
and could vary
greatly
from
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person
to
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person
, being able to fulfil
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dreams
and ambitions and being able to be
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recognised
among
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people
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is
a common definition we can attach to the
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term
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success
. While a sports personality desire
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success
by doing
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some
ground breaking records in his sports, a
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new
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actor
can
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dream
to perform in a
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big
budget hit movie as his
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success
. When this
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actor
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gains
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some
fame, he
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might
desire to win the Oscar prize and can
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make
it his milestone for
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success
. It is
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often
said that
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success
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might
be easy to
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gain
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but
more difficult to maintain and I completely
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agree
with this notion.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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hard
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work
, determination and talent
are required
to
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gain
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success
. If we consider a
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new
employee who
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might
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expect
to
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reach
the higher ladder of his
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career
and works
really
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hard
, he
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might
one day fulfil his
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dream
.
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But
the real challenge is in performing the duties as a senior executive and that’s even
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harder
than reaching this position. A singer, movie
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actor
and sportsman can
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gain
fame and
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success
by showing superb
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performance
once and everybody will then look at them and
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expect
them to perform well
continuously
. This is not that easy and requires even more
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hard
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work
to maintain the
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performance
. If we look at the movie industries, it is not uncommon that
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many
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new
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actors
and actresses
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show
great potential in their early state of
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career
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but
can’t
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reach
the position they ought to have due to their lack of
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hard
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work
and determination. Luck
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often
plays its tricks
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but
if we omit the part played by the luck, it remains
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hard
works, determination and excellent
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performance
which become even
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harder
when someone
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gains
popularity.

Second, we all have our short
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term
and long
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term
ambitions and being able to accomplish a goal does not
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stop
us from dreaming even bigger
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dreams
. Being successful for someone does not mean that he can then
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stop
and enjoy his
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success
. It opens
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new
possibilities and responsibilities and to
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reach
the
next
level, we need to
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work
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harder
at that stage. Maintaining
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success
means performing excellence all the time which in reality is a
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very
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hard
to maintain.

Third, the definition of
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success
is
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ever changing
even for a single
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person
. A 10 years
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old
child defines his
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success
by achieving excellent grades and it
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changes
as
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soon
as he enters in his
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career
. The successful students then
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have to
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work
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harder
to prove his supremacy among other talented workers.
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Thus
when he attains
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success
and
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reach
in a higher position of a
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company
, he then needs to take even bigger responsibilities. A single blunder can then ruin his
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career
and shatter his
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dream
of
further
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success
. This
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keeps
on changing and
thus
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success
in
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different
states in life varies. Continuous efforts and works
are required
to maintain
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success
for a
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person
in his life.

In conclusion
, it is
indeed
true that maintaining
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success
is far more difficult than achieving it as it requires even more
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hard
works and continuous excellent
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performance
in every field.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
76Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay It is frequently remarked that success is easy to attain but difficult to maintain. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
536 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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