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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your ownYou should spend about 40 minutes on t v.2

It is better to save money than to spend it. How far Is saving more important than spending in today’s world? 2
It is a fact that a growing number of people choose to live alone or in the nuclear family, rather than in the traditional extended family groups. This trend has introduced both positive and negative aspects because of the benefits and drawbacks have been brought to human life. On the one hand, it is clear that the new living pattern would bring about several advantages. One evident strength is that it offers more privacy and personal space for individuals, many students and professionals would opt to live alone or with a small group of peers while attending university or working. Living independently allows more freedom to plan one’s schedule, lifestyle and social activities without being interfered with by family members. Furthermore, small family units, represented by both parents with one child or two, also present more opportunities for family members to interact with and care for each other. Living in extended families, on the contrary, distracts the parents’ attention from their children and is not helpful to the youngsters’ education. On the other hand, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. First, living separately results in the reduction of communication between family members, which may bring about feelings of loneliness and homesickness. That situation can become worse if an individual has to face enormous stress or struggle with some kinds of health problems without any support from relatives. Second, in nuclear families, children might grow with insufficient parental care because some parents mostly put their efforts into earning a living for families. As a result, those children could even engage in criminal activities such as illegal drug use. In conclusion, this tendency shows effects on both sides whether it is positive or negative. There are plus points to live alone or in a small family since they offer more personal space to meet personal needs and more communication in the family. However, the downside would emerge consequently in terms of loneliness and a minus point for nurturing children.
It is a fact that a growing number of
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people
choose to
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live
alone or in the nuclear
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family
,
rather
than in the traditional extended
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family
groups. This trend has introduced both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects
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because
of the benefits and drawbacks have
been brought
to human life.

On the one hand, it is
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clear
that the new
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living
pattern would bring about several advantages. One evident strength is that it offers more privacy and personal space for individuals,
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many
students and professionals would opt to
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live
alone or with a
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small
group of peers while attending university or working.
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Living
independently
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allows
more freedom to plan one’s schedule, lifestyle and social activities without
being interfered
with by
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family
members.
Furthermore
,
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small
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family
units, represented by both parents with one child or two,
also
present more opportunities for
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family
members to interact with and care for each other.
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Living
in extended
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families
,
on the contrary
, distracts the parents’ attention from their
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children
and is not helpful to the youngsters’ education.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
obvious disadvantages that would arise.
First
,
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living
separately
results in the reduction of communication between
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family
members, which may bring about feelings of loneliness and homesickness. That situation can become worse if an individual
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has to
face enormous
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stress
or struggle with
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some
kinds of health problems without any support from relatives. Second, in nuclear
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families
,
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children
might grow with insufficient parental care
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because
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some
parents
mostly
put their efforts into earning a
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living
for
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families
.
As a result
, those
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children
could even engage in criminal activities such as illegal drug
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use
.

In conclusion
, this tendency
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shows
effects on both sides whether it is
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positive
or
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negative
. There are plus points to
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live
alone or in a
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small
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
since they offer more personal space to
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meet
personal needs and more communication in the
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family
.
However
, the downside would emerge
consequently
in terms of loneliness and a minus point for nurturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better to save money than to spend it. How far Is saving more important than spending in today’s world? 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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