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It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. v. 2
There is no doubt that building strong relationship takes time and effort. While many argue that having a single best friend is more beneficial than having many acquaintances. I believe having one true friend is better than having hundreds that you rarely know. Firstly, you can rely on a friend that you have a strong relationship with. This is because you have invested your time to build that relationship. If it is going on for years, that means it has stood the test of time. It means you both know each others emotions and feelings. For instance, your childhood friend is more likely to help you in a difficult situation than any of your recent friends. If you are expecting something from your acquaintances in the time of need, you are most likely to get disappointed. As a result, you might have an emotional trauma, which is not easily healed. This can have a negative impact on your future relationships. Secondly, you trust your true friend more than any acquaintances. This is because you know each others qualities and flaws. For example, you can share anything with your best friend without any fear. This shows the trust developed over time. In contrast, you will not share any private information with the people you hardly know. This shows the importance of a true friend. Even if the relationship takes years to build, in the end, you can trust them blindly. Furthermore, when you have faith in someone, you trust all their decisions. It is very helpful in a situation where you are confused between the two options. They can help you navigate any plight. To conclude, a good relationship takes time and effort to build. However, in the end, it is worth it. I feel one true friend can not only help you in any circumstances, but the trust you have with each other is lifelong.
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and effort.
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argue that
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having
a single best
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friend
is more beneficial than
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having
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many
acquaintances. I believe
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having
one
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true
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friend
is better than
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having
hundreds that you rarely know.

Firstly
, you can rely on a
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friend
that you have a strong
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relationship
with. This is
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because
you have invested your
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time
to build that
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relationship
. If it is going on for years, that means it has stood the
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test
of
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time
. It means you both know each others emotions and feelings.
For instance
, your childhood
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friend
is more likely to
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help
you in a difficult situation than any of your recent
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friends
. If you are expecting something from your acquaintances in the
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time
of need, you are most likely to
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get
disappointed.
As a result
, you might have an emotional trauma, which is not
easily
healed. This can have a
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negative
impact on your future relationships.

Secondly
, you
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trust
your
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true
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friend
more than any acquaintances. This is
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because
you know each others qualities and flaws.
For example
, you can share anything with your best
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friend
without any fear. This
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shows
the
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trust
developed over
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time
.
In contrast
, you will not share any private information with the
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people
you hardly know. This
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shows
the importance of a
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true
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friend
. Even if the
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relationship
takes years to build, in the
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end
, you can
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trust
them
blindly
.
Furthermore
, when you have faith in someone, you
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trust
all their decisions. It is
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very
helpful in a situation where you
are confused
between the two options. They can
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help
you navigate any plight.

To conclude
, a
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good
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relationship
takes
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time
and effort to build.
However
, in the
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end
, it is worth it. I feel one
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true
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friend
can not
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only
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help
you in any circumstances,
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the
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you have with each other is lifelong.
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IELTS essay It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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