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It is better to are your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice. v.1

It is better to are your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice. v. 1
Communities play an integral role in peoples' lives. There is no doubt these days people are completely unaware of their neighbourhood and it has a deleterious effect on society. The main reason behind this is leading busy at work and spending more time on social media. The possible solutions to overcome this problem might be to encourage community events and organize monthly get together. One of the imperative causes which often prevents people from mingling with neighbours is a hectic schedule. People work round the clock and tend to be extremely busy to keep pace with the fast world owing to competitive era, which does not give them opportunities to interact with the people living next door. Another reason for not knowing neighbour is spending more time on social media. Nowadays, after leading busy from morning to evening people often want to rejuvenate their mood, so they like to spend time on Facebook, Whatsup and keep up-to-date with the latest news. As a result, they are less inclined to do face to face meetings with their neighbours. The possible solutions to this difficulty would be organizing community events. The government should encourage community festivals so that people get a chance to come over there and attend events, which results in acquainted with neighbours. Moreover, community officials should do get together every month. This would be beneficial for the society members as not only will they come across with new neighbours, but also can build a good relationship with them. In conclusion, leading a busy schedule and spending time on social media is the fundamental causes, which allow them to spend less time with neighbours. Only when government support community events and community official organize a monthly gathering, will the issue be solved.
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Communities
play an integral role in peoples'
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lives
. There is no doubt these days
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people
are completely unaware of their
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neighbourhood
and it has a deleterious effect on society. The main reason behind this is leading
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busy
at work and spending more
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time
on social media. The possible solutions to overcome this problem might be to encourage
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community
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events
and organize monthly
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get
together.

One of the imperative causes which
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often
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prevents
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people
from mingling with
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neighbours
is a hectic schedule.
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People
work round the clock and tend to be
extremely
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busy
to
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keep
pace with the
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fast
world owing to competitive era, which does not give them opportunities to interact with the
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people
living
next
door. Another reason for not knowing
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neighbour
is spending more
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time
on social media. Nowadays, after leading
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busy
from morning to evening
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people
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often
want to rejuvenate their mood,
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so
they like to spend
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time
on Facebook,
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Whatsup
and
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keep
up-to-date with the latest news.
As a result
, they are less inclined to do face to face meetings with their
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neighbours
.

The possible solutions to this difficulty would be organizing
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community
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events
. The
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government
should encourage
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community
festivals
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so
that
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people
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get
a chance to
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come
over there and attend
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events
, which results in acquainted with
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neighbours
.
Moreover
,
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community
officials should do
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get
together every month. This would be beneficial for the society members as not
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only
will they
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come
across with new
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neighbours
,
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but
also
can build a
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good
relationship with them.

In conclusion
, leading a
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busy
schedule and spending
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time
on social media is the fundamental causes, which
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allow
them to spend less
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time
with
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neighbours
.
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Only
when
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government
support
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community
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events
and
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community
official organize a monthly gathering, will the issue
be solved
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay It is better to are your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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