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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 4
The Preference of the science subjects in many universities is declining. Not many students are likely to choose the science courses in many countries. This essay will discuss the reasons for this situation and will also put forward the effects of them on this society. Quite a lot of teenagers, feel choosing the science subjects will ruin their college life, by making them more diligent. This study requires more patience and dedication in a long run. The term of study of these courses is more when compared to other non-science courses. However, they follow different patterns of marking, these are not scored as easily as the other courses. If a candidate does not score the required mark in the first attempt, that candidate will not be promoted until he obtains the required one. Another major impact on the students for not ending up in those studies is that lack of the job opportunities. After struggling these many years, not all the science graduates end up in a proper job, whereas many of the jobs are related to research, but with these a good salary cannot be obtained and running a family would become a challenging task. This has an enormous effect on the society, as they reduce a lot of human resources, and this is the main reason for our society lagging behind in contrast to others. Many people do not wish to earn less by studying more, however, they are going to earn more in a long run when compared to others. This is also an important reason why the society stands at the last in research and the development side. As, this reduces many business activities, and also many other nations prefer those who are well versed in the research and the development. The more students prefer science, there will good increase in the human resources. In conclusion, the more people preferring science will make the nation wealthier. The society is the main reason for creating such a big fear among the individuals. They also help in the development of the nation and it is the society’s duty to create a more human crisis.
The Preference of the
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science
subjects in
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many
universities is declining. Not
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many
students are likely to choose the
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science
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courses
in
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many
countries. This essay will discuss the
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reasons
for this situation and will
also
put forward the effects of them on this society.

Quite
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a lot of
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teenagers
, feel choosing the
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science
subjects will ruin their college life, by making them more diligent. This study requires more patience and dedication in a long run. The term of study of these
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courses
is more when compared to
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other
non-science
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courses
.
However
, they follow
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different
patterns of marking, these are not scored as
easily
as the
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other
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courses
. If a candidate does not score the required mark in the
first
attempt, that candidate will not
be promoted
until he obtains the required one. Another major impact on the students for not ending up in those studies is that lack of the job opportunities. After struggling these
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many
years, not all the
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science
graduates
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end
up in a proper job, whereas
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many
of the jobs
are related
to research,
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but
with these a
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good
salary cannot
be obtained
and running a family would become a challenging task.

This has an enormous effect on the
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society
, as they
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reduce
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a lot of
human resources, and this is the main
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reason
for our
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society
lagging behind
in contrast
to others.
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Many
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people
do not wish to earn less by studying more,
however
, they are going to earn more in a long run when compared to others. This is
also
an
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important
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reason
why the
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society
stands at the last in research and the development side. As, this
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reduces
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many
business activities, and
also
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many
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other
nations prefer those who are well versed in the research and the development. The more students prefer
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science
, there will
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good
increase in the human resources.

In conclusion
, the more
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people
preferring
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science
will
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make
the nation wealthier. The
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society
is the main
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reason
for creating such a
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big
fear among the individuals. They
also
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help
in the development of the nation and it is the
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society’s
duty to create a more human crisis.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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