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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words. v.10

It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 10
Should students stay in hostels or should they continue to live in their family house? This topic has somewhat become debatable. I strongly agree with the premise that students must not live in their homes during student life. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss why living on campus is more effective and how living further away from the college can be a potential impediment to studies. To begin with, the biggest advantage of living in an on campus facility like a hostel is that students have access to all the necessary amenities like libraries, computer labs etc. Hence, they can conduct their studies more effectively. The ambience that on-campus residential facilities provide is also very conducive for studying. In addition to that, since hostels are normally situated in the same vicinity as the College campus, daily commute becomes very easy and is not at all hectic. In contrast, living in your parent’s house while studying has several inherent problems. For instance, in order to study productively and effectively, right environment is of absolute importance. Unfortunately, a well-disciplined environment of that of a classroom cannot be replicated at home. Students might spend more than usual time on extracurricular activities like playing video games, watching T. V. , excessively staying out at night with friends etc. Which may consequently impact their grades. To conclude, students must prefer to live in hostels instead of staying in their own house during college years. This will allow them to focus more efficiently on studies and they can also refrain themselves from engaging in unnecessary activities that may have a deteriorating impact on their study life.
Should
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students
stay in
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hostels
or should they continue to
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live
in their family
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house
? This topic has somewhat become debatable. I
strongly
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agree
with the premise that
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students
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must
not
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live
in their homes during
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student
life. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss why
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living
on campus is more effective and how
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living
further
away from the college can be a potential impediment to studies.

To
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begin
with, the biggest advantage of
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living
in an on campus facility like a
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hostel
is that
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students
have access to all the necessary amenities like libraries, computer labs etc.
Hence
, they can conduct their
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studies
more
effectively
. The ambience that on-campus residential facilities provide is
also
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very
conducive for studying.
In addition
to that, since
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hostels
are
normally
situated in the same vicinity as the College campus, daily commute becomes
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very
easy and is not at all hectic.

In contrast
,
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living
in your parent’s
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house
while studying has several inherent problems.
For instance
, in order to
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study
productively
and
effectively
, right environment is of absolute importance. Unfortunately, a well-disciplined environment of that of a classroom cannot
be replicated
at home.
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Students
might spend more than usual time on extracurricular activities like playing video games, watching T. V.
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,
excessively
staying out at night with friends etc.
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Which
may
consequently
impact their grades.

To conclude
,
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students
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must
prefer to
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live
in
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hostels
instead
of staying in their
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own
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house
during college years. This will
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allow
them to focus more
efficiently
on
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studies and
they can
also
refrain themselves from engaging in unnecessary activities that may have a deteriorating impact on their
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study
life.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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