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It is better for colleage students to live in schools than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is better for colleage students to live in schools than live at home with their parents. v. 1
Despite knowing about the biodiversity’s importance for a long time, human activity has been causing massive extinctions of different species. This essay will examine the main causes of loss of biodiversity and possible solutions of this problem. The two main causes of species extinction are by the change of their habitats and overexploitation of natural resources. When humans artificially transform the environment, they destroy vegetation and animals’ natural habitat. For instance, to build new roads people are cutting down the trees and cementing the soil, altering the environment. Because of that, a lot of species are dying out. Also, when the activities connected with capturing and harvesting a natural resource are too intense in a particular area, the resource becomes exhausted. For example, too frequent fishing doesn’t leave enough time for fish to reproduce and makes them disappear. In other words, human activities often deplete local flora and fauna and cause loss of bio-diversity. Some possible solutions to this problem are protecting natural areas and promoting awareness among people. By protecting areas where human activity is limited and avoiding over-exploitation of its resources, we can save the untouched environment and prevent species from dying out. Moreover, the next step in fighting bio-diversity loss is informing the general population about the dangers of this problem. This way, people will be more conscious of the environment and won’t overuse or destroy its resources. To conclude, people’s activities that change the environment have a negative impact on the world's ecosystem. However, we can significantly lessen the extinction of species by protecting natural areas and enlightening people as to this problem.
Despite knowing about the biodiversity’s importance for a long time,
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human
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activity
has been causing massive extinctions of
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different
species. This essay will examine the main causes of loss of biodiversity and possible solutions of this problem.

The two main causes of species extinction are by the
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change
of their habitats and overexploitation of
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natural
resources. When
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humans
artificially
transform the
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environment
, they
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destroy
vegetation and animals’
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natural
habitat.
For instance
, to build new roads
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people
are cutting down the trees and cementing the soil, altering the
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environment
.
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Because
of that,
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a lot of
species are dying out.
Also
, when the
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activities
connected with capturing and harvesting a
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natural
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resource
are too intense in a particular
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area
, the
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resource
becomes exhausted.
For example
, too frequent fishing doesn’t
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leave
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enough
time for fish to reproduce and
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makes
them disappear.
In other words
,
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human
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activities
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often
deplete local flora and fauna and cause loss of bio-diversity.

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Some
possible solutions to this problem are protecting
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natural
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areas
and promoting awareness among
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people
. By protecting
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areas
where
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human
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activity
is limited
and avoiding over-exploitation of its resources, we can save the untouched
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environment
and
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prevent
species from dying out.
Moreover
, the
next
step in fighting bio-diversity loss is informing the general population about the
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dangers
of this problem. This way,
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people
will be more conscious of the
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environment
and won’t overuse or
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destroy
its resources.

To conclude
,
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people’s
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activities
that
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change
the
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environment
have a
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negative
impact on the world's ecosystem.
However
, we can
significantly
lessen the extinction of species by protecting
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natural
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areas
and enlightening
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people
as to this problem.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for colleage students to live in schools than live at home with their parents. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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