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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v.2

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v. 2
Improvement of the health care system in the 21st century has led to the low mortality rate in young people, which in turn has led to a growing figure of the young population in countries worldwide. Most countries today witness more statistics of young people and less of older people. This essay will discuss the negative and positive impacts of this situation. One advantage of a larger percentage of young adults when compared to the old in a country is the increase in the workforce. Most countries in the world with a vibrant labour force today, owe it to a huge sum of the younger populace. Research reported in the media claims that the quality of workforce seen in developing countries can be attributed to the sum of young people. In short, it can be said that the large population of young adults can be equated to an improved human resource. Furthermore, having more young people in a country can lead to more innovation. A case in point is that the minds of young adults are known to be more vibrant, flexible and energetic. Such minds undoubtedly make breakthroughs in scientific research, medicine and academics. A recent poll in the United States discovered that most innovations in the aforementioned fields were mostly made by teeming young minds. A rise in the statistics of the young without a doubt leads to innovation in every society. Despite these positive impacts, there are drawbacks. A larger young adults might not be favourable to under- developed countries. Although an active population of young brains leads to innovation and a strong workforce, but when there is no good labour market to absorb these intelligent minds, it invariably leads to increased of dependants. For example, most third world countries with a high proportion of young adults, compared with older people surprisingly record a high dependency ratio. In conclusion, although there are positives and negatives related to both sides, I believe that the disadvantages are more.
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young
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, which in turn has led to a growing figure of the
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young
population in
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countries
worldwide. Most
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countries
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today
witness more statistics of
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people
and less of older
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people
. This essay will discuss the
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negative
and
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impacts of this situation.

One advantage of a larger percentage of
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young
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adults
when compared to the
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old
in a
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country
is the increase in the workforce. Most
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countries
in the world with a vibrant
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force
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today
, owe it to a huge sum of the younger populace. Research reported in the media claims that the quality of workforce
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seen
in developing
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countries
can
be attributed
to the sum of
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young
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people
. In short, it can
be said
that the large population of
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young
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can
be equated
to an
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improved
human resource.

Furthermore
, having more
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people
in a
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country
can
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lead
to more
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innovation
. A case in point is that the
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minds
of
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young
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adults
are known
to be more vibrant, flexible and energetic. Such
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minds
undoubtedly
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make
breakthroughs in scientific research, medicine and academics. A recent poll in the United States discovered that most
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innovations
in the aforementioned fields were
mostly
made by teeming
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young
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minds
. A rise in the statistics of the
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young
without a doubt leads to
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innovation
in every society.

Despite these
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positive
impacts, there are drawbacks. A larger
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young
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adults
might not be
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favourable
to under- developed
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countries
. Although an active population of
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young
brains leads to
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innovation
and a strong workforce,
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but
when there is no
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good
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labour
market to absorb these intelligent
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minds
, it
invariably
leads to increased of
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dependants
.
For example
, most third world
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countries
with a high proportion of
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young
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adults
, compared with older
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people
surprisingly
record a high dependency ratio.

In conclusion
, although there are positives and negatives related to both sides, I believe that the disadvantages are more.
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IELTS essay It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your Speaking. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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