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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change their jobs. v. 2
In this contemporary era, there is a heated argument about the topic that, it is better to get a job early and pursue that job will get more satisfaction than continuously changing their jobs. The Majority of people favour it, however, the rest opposes it. I firmly believe that, a single job would give us more happiness. There are plenty of reasons for my argument. Frist and foremost, getting a perfect job in an early stage of our carrier is a blessing. In simple words, this is because, which gives us a more steady carrier and an exponential growth. By getting an early job helps us in two different ways. The first one is, it gives a better establishment for us in that field and secondly, we get promotion and other amenities along with our growth in that carrier. For example, about 80 percentage of people are likely to continue with their current jobs, due to the expectations of getting a large promotion or a salary hike. Secondly, staying or continuing in the same job for years will give more experience as well as confidence in that job. This will hugely affect in our productivity in that area. Moreover, we can get settled around the age between 25 to 30, if we started earning earlier. For instance, Times Now published an article which explains that, most of people are happy to pursue on their current jobs, due to the salary they are having. More than 60 percentage of youth is following this trend. However, this is not same for all cases, some people intent to focus on their dream job instead of money, because of that they keep changing their jobs. To recapitulate, an early job and a steady carrier will only result in good life, instead of jumping from one job to another. However, there is no reasonable argument against this very phenomenon.
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early
and pursue that
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job
will
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get
more satisfaction than
continuously
changing their
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jobs
. The Majority of
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people
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favour
it,
however
, the rest opposes it. I
firmly
believe that, a single
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job
would
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give
us more happiness.

There are
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plenty
of reasons for my argument.
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Frist
and foremost, getting a perfect
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job
in an
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early
stage of our
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carrier
is a blessing. In simple words, this is
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because
, which
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gives
us a more steady
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carrier
and an exponential growth. By getting an
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early
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job
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helps
us in two
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different
ways. The
first
one is, it
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gives
a better establishment for us in that field and
secondly
, we
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get
promotion and other amenities along with our growth in that
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carrier
.
For example
, about 80 percentage of
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people
are likely to continue with their
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current
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jobs
, due to the expectations of getting a large promotion or a salary hike.

Secondly
, staying or continuing in the same
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job
for years will
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give
more experience
as well
as confidence in that
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job
. This will
hugely
affect in our productivity in that area.
Moreover
, we can
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get
settled around the age
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between 25 to 30
, if we
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started
earning earlier.
For instance
, Times
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Now
published an article which
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explains
that, most of
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people
are happy to pursue on their
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current
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jobs
, due to the salary they are having. More than 60 percentage of youth is following this trend.
However
, this is not same for all cases,
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some
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people
intent to focus on their dream
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job
instead
of money,
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because
of that they
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keep
changing their jobs.

To recapitulate, an
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early
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job
and a steady
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carrier
will
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only
result in
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good
life,
instead
of jumping from one
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job
to another.
However
, there is no reasonable argument against this
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very
phenomenon.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change their jobs. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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