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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.16

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 16
It is true that there has been a rise in the number of people taking a year long break after completing school and before joining the university. The main advantage of this trend is that it gives sufficient time for a teenager to learn new skills and the main drawback is that this can also be a waste of time if it is not planned carefully. Taking a year off after the completion of school has several merits. To commence with, it gives an individual enough amount of time to concentrate on enhancing his skills. In addition, an adolescent can invest this time to prepare for engineering or medical entrance examinations which are difficult to clear without adequate preparation. For instance, as per recent research by the Times, only 20% of the students who cleared the IIT exam in 2018 were freshers and the rest of the students were one-year droppers. Moreover, a student can master skills like communication, foreign languages and also learn sports such as cricket, tennis, football and several others in this one year. On the flip side, the main disadvantage of this phenomenon is that if planning is not done properly, then this can be just wastage of the time. Instead of taking a year gap after finishing school, a person can take admission in college and get a job after completing his college studies. As a result, this will save him one year and will also help him to gain hands-on work experience which is more vital than theoretical knowledge. For example, a recent study revealed that 60% of the students who took a year off before joining university had done nothing fruitful and thus it was a total waste of time. In conclusion, although the decision to take time off before enrolling into a college is good for those who are very serious about their career, proper planning is essential to avoid wastage of time.
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people
taking a
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year
long break after completing school and
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before
joining the university. The main advantage of this trend is that it gives sufficient
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time
for a
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teenager
to learn new
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skills
and the main drawback is that this can
also
be a waste of
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time
if it is not planned
carefully
.

Taking a
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year
off after the completion of school has several merits. To commence with, it gives an individual
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enough
amount of
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time
to concentrate on enhancing his
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skills
.
In addition
, an adolescent can invest this
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time
to prepare for engineering or medical entrance examinations which are difficult to
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clear
without adequate preparation.
For instance
, as per recent research by the
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Times
,
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only
20% of the
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students
who cleared the IIT exam in 2018 were freshers and the rest of the
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students
were one-year droppers.
Moreover
, a
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student
can master
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skills
like communication, foreign languages and
also
learn sports such as cricket, tennis, football and several others in this one year.

On the flip side, the main disadvantage of this phenomenon is that if planning is not done
properly
, then this can be
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just
wastage of the
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time
.
Instead
of taking a
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gap after finishing school, a person can take admission in college and
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get
a job after completing his college studies.
As a result
, this will save him one
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year
and will
also
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help
him to gain hands-on work experience which is more vital than theoretical knowledge.
For example
, a recent study revealed that 60% of the
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students
who took a
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year
off
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before
joining university had done nothing fruitful and
thus
it was a total waste of time.

In conclusion
, although the decision to take
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time
off
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before
enrolling into a college is
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good
for those who are
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very
serious about their career, proper planning is essential to avoid wastage of
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time
.
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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