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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this. ? v.13

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this. ? v. 13
Off recent, the common trend is having a year gap between completion of high school and commencing higher education. This time is usually loaded with a lot of activities like engaging in paid jobs, traveling, skill acquisition or interest exploration but these youngsters can as well develop some bad habits if they are not well guided. This essay will then discuss the strengths and drawbacks of this development. There are numerous merits to having a year break following secondary school education and before beginning higher learning pursuit. Firstly, the students when engaged in paid jobs gives them the opportunity to financially support their education. Higher education is a capital intensive project and these school leavers are able to save tangibly to relieve their sponsors of some expenses. Secondly, they are opportuned to acquire soft skills needed for better interaction in the larger society and they are able to build their CV with working experience. Thirdly, this exposure assist them to be more judicious in spending and appreciate their guardian uniquely because they now know the effort exerted to get money no matter how little. Lastly, it is a good time to rejuvenate from rigorous academic activities of high school such as several hours of lectures, assignments and possibly explore their interests. Finally, the design of having a break to do something different from academics while awaiting higher education admission is a great one if used judiciously with good guidance having considered the myriads of merits outlined. Despite the numerous advantages, there are some disadvantages. To begin with, these adolescents having been exposed to some freedom and access to acquire fund may find it difficult to return to study. They may loose the value or interest attached to academics and feel contented with the financial strength that the paid jobs offer. Furthermore, 12 calendar month is a long time to enjoy those liberties if they are not closely guided. They may be exposed to various vices like drugs, stealing, sexual assaults just to mention a few. This may make a well tamed child becoming irresponsible. In conclusion, having a year off following the completion of high school before commencing higher institution is on the increase because of many benefits it offers. Although, there are some cons to this new trend if the child is not given adequate guidance.
Off recent, the common trend is
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having
a year gap between completion of high
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school
and commencing higher
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education
. This time is
usually
loaded with
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a lot of
activities like engaging in paid jobs, traveling,
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skill
acquisition or interest exploration
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but
these youngsters can
as well
develop
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some
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bad
habits if they are not well guided. This essay will then discuss the strengths and drawbacks of this development.

There are numerous merits to
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having
a year break following secondary
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school
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education
and
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before
beginning higher learning pursuit.
Firstly
, the students when engaged in paid jobs gives them the opportunity to
financially
support their
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education
. Higher
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education
is a capital intensive project and these
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school leavers
are able to save
tangibly
to relieve their sponsors of
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some
expenses.
Secondly
, they are
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opportuned
to acquire soft
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skills
needed for better interaction in the larger
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society and
they are able to build their CV with working experience.
Thirdly
, this exposure assist them to be more judicious in spending and appreciate their guardian
uniquely
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because
they
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now
know the effort exerted to
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get
money no matter how
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little
.
Lastly
, it is a
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good
time to rejuvenate from rigorous academic activities of high
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school
such as several hours of lectures, assignments and
possibly
explore their interests.
Finally
, the design of
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having
a break to do something
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different
from academics while awaiting higher
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education
admission is a great one if
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used
judiciously
with
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good
guidance
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having
considered the myriads of merits outlined.

Despite the numerous advantages, there are
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some
disadvantages. To
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begin
with, these adolescents
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having
been exposed
to
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some
freedom and access to acquire fund may find it difficult to return to study. They may
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loose
the value or interest attached to academics and feel contented with the financial strength that the paid jobs offer.
Furthermore
, 12 calendar
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month
is a long time to enjoy those liberties if they are not
closely
guided. They may
be exposed
to various vices like drugs, stealing, sexual assaults
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just
to mention a few. This may
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make
a well tamed child becoming irresponsible.

In conclusion
,
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having
a year off following the completion of high
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school
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before
commencing higher institution is on the increase
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because
of
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many
benefits it offers. Although, there are
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some
cons to this new trend if the child is not
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given
adequate guidance.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this. ? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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