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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e. g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people believe that there are no compelling reasons for us to protect animal species from extinction as it occurs naturally. I personally disagree with this conviction and will support my argument in the essay below. It is true that millions of years ago, many ancient species of animals, such as dinosaurs, were wiped out due to a gradual shift in climate and changing sea levels, according to some hypotheses. However, these environmental factors are not the primary contributor to the disappearance of certain species nowadays. Industrial activities have been devastating the natural habitats of wildlife and disturbing the food chain, causing the mass extinction of countless species. The increased demand for goods made from animals’ products, such as skins and horns, also leads to the rampant poaching of wild, endangered animals, rhinos for instance. In this regard, humans are held accountable and should do what is needed to rectify the situation. Other justifications for saving wild animals involve the significant roles that they play in not only the balance of the ecosystem but also our lives. Everything in nature is connected, and if one species becomes extinct, many other animals and even plants will suffer as the food chain is disrupted. Wild animals also have great aesthetic and socio-cultural values. They contribute to our rich bio-diversity that makes this planet a beautiful place. In numerous places around the world, many types of animals play an important role in different cultures. For example, in some religions, cows are revered and worshiped as gods. The disappearance of many animal species does not always occur as a natural process but as a conse quence of our doings. It is our obligation to help preserve wild animals because their extinction will have a severe influence on many important aspects of our lives.
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Some
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people
believe that there are no compelling reasons for us to protect
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animal
species from extinction as it occurs
naturally
. I
personally
disagree with this conviction and will support my argument in the essay below.

It is true that millions of years ago,
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many
ancient species of
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animals
, such as dinosaurs,
were wiped
out due to a gradual shift in climate and changing sea levels, according to
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some
hypotheses.
However
, these environmental factors are not the primary contributor to the disappearance of certain species nowadays. Industrial activities have been devastating the natural habitats of wildlife and disturbing the food chain, causing the mass extinction of countless species. The increased demand for
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goods
made from
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animals’
products, such as skins and horns,
also
leads to the rampant poaching of wild, endangered
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animals
, rhinos
for instance
. In this regard, humans
are held
accountable and should do what
is needed
to rectify the situation.

Other justifications for saving wild
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animals
involve the significant roles that they play in not
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only
the balance of the ecosystem
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but
also
our
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lives
. Everything in nature
is connected
, and if one species becomes extinct,
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many
other
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animals
and even plants will suffer as the food chain
is disrupted
. Wild
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animals
also
have great aesthetic and
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socio-cultural
values. They contribute to our rich bio-diversity that
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makes
this planet a
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beautiful
place. In numerous places around the world,
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many
types of
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animals
play an
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important
role in
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different
cultures.
For example
, in
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some
religions, cows
are revered
and worshiped as gods.

The disappearance of
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many
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animal
species does not always occur as a natural process
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but
as a
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conse quence
of our doings. It is our obligation to
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help
preserve wild
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animals
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because
their extinction will have a severe influence on
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many
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important
aspects of our
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lives
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IELTS essay It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e. g. Dinosaurs, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
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