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20. Disruptive school students have negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separate. Do you agree and disagree with this statement. v.2

Today's world has become more competitive and dynamic as compared to earlier times. Hence, some echelons assert that toppers should get separate teaching lessons, whereas others deprecate with this viewpoint suggesting that all students must get education together. In this dissertation, I will shed some light on both and notions and provide my opinion in upcoming fragments. To embark on, some people vehemently deems that there are significant benefits of teaching intellectual pupils in different group. Firstly, there is a healthy competition among them for the exams and other activities. Consequently, they have to strive hard to get good grades and improve the performance in the classroom due to other competing with the same or higher level of IQ. Secondly, as they can quickly grab information; therefore, they can readily cover the syllabus in less time-span. For instance - teacher can get the entire chapter finished in two days in case of scholars which otherwise would take almost a week for other students. On the other hand, there is a caveat to this phenomenon. One reason is that intelligence is mainly a genetic trait and there should be no discrimination based on the level of intellect. Another reason is that average people may feel sense of inferiority due to categorised as low level students. In addition to this, others might make fun of them which may further degrade their confidence. Furthermore, if all study together, the other ones may get inspiration to compete with high IQ students and also befriend them and learn their ways of study. For example - intelligent ones can help the others in the problematic areas or topics by telling them their own strategies and methods in solving the issues. In compendious, although there are various advantages of teaching intelligent students in a different environment, however, in my opinion there should be equality and also students must study together to gain benefit from each other and to have a healthy competition spirit.
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echelons assert that toppers should
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separate teaching lessons, whereas others deprecate with this viewpoint suggesting that all
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students
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must
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education together. In this dissertation, I will shed
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light on both and notions and provide my opinion in upcoming fragments.

To embark on,
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some
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people
vehemently
deems that there are significant benefits of teaching intellectual pupils in
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different
group.
Firstly
, there is a healthy competition among them for the exams and
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other
activities.
Consequently
, they
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have to
strive
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hard
to
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get
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good
grades and
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improve
the performance in the classroom due to
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other
competing with the same or higher level of IQ.
Secondly
, as they can
quickly
grab information;
therefore
, they can
readily
cover the syllabus in less time-span.
For instance
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-
teacher can
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get
the entire chapter finished in two days in case of scholars which
otherwise
would take almost a week for
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other
students.

On the
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other
hand, there is a caveat to this phenomenon. One reason is that intelligence is
mainly
a genetic trait and there should be no discrimination based on the level of intellect. Another reason is that average
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people
may feel sense of inferiority due to
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categorised
as low level
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students
.
In addition
to this, others might
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make
fun of them which may
further
degrade their confidence.
Furthermore
, if all study together, the
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other
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ones
may
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get
inspiration to compete with high IQ
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students
and
also
befriend them and learn their ways of study.
For example
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-
intelligent
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ones
can
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help
the others in the problematic areas or topics by telling them their
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own
strategies and methods in solving the issues.

In compendious, although there are various advantages of teaching intelligent
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students
in a
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different
environment,
however
, in my opinion there should be equality and
also
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
study together to gain benefit from each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
and to have a healthy competition spirit.
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IELTS essay It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. discuss and present your own opinion.

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