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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct e g Dinosaur dodos There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening Do you agree or disagree v.1

It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct e g Dinosaur dodos There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening v. 1
Today, folks want to live in Cityside for a better life for them and their kids. In order to get a good job and peaceful life, the masses are going to cities. This essay will discuss the causative factors why this is happening and put forward corrective actions for this issue. There are two contributing factors why people are moving away from rural areas to urban areas. Firstly, cities give masses best jobs and all necessary facilities. Many youngsters make their future safe and happy. For example, folks can earn more money and give basic facilities to their kids, such as education, medical facilities and so on. Secondly, commuting facilities are easily available for them and their family. If juveniles want to go to their school, they can easily go there by transport. One research article suggests that around 15% teenagers and youngsters are going to the urban side from rural side. Overall, cities help people to get better job satisfaction and basic facilities. In order to solve these problems, there are two remedial measures should be considered. Firstly, governments should develop the rural areas. If they develop those destinations, people will not try to move in their future life. For instance, If bureaucrats build companies in the area, people will get work easily. Secondly, the authorities should render medical provisions, transport amenities and education facilities. Children can go to school easily by public transport. To illustrate, Veerpur village, located in Gujarat, has all the facilities and it was awarded for the fastest developed village in India. Overall, Authorities should confer necessary amenities and better job. This essay discussed contributing factors, such as work and all basic provisions. In addition, this essay discussed counter measures which are by building new companies and bestow all provisions for people of rural areas.
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Cityside
for a better life for them and their kids. In order to
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get
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job and peaceful life, the masses are going to cities. This essay will discuss the causative factors why this is happening and put forward corrective actions for this issue.

There are two contributing factors why
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people
are moving away from
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rural
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areas
to urban
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areas
.
Firstly
, cities give masses best jobs and all necessary facilities.
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Many
youngsters
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make
their future safe and happy.
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, folks can earn more money and give basic facilities to their kids, such as education, medical facilities and
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so
on.
Secondly
, commuting facilities are
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easily
available for them and their family. If juveniles want to go to their school, they can
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easily
go there by transport. One research article suggests that around 15%
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teenagers
and youngsters are going to the urban side from
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rural
side.
Overall
, cities
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help
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people
to
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get
better job satisfaction and basic facilities.

In order to solve these problems, there are two remedial measures should
be considered
.
Firstly
,
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governments
should develop the
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rural
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areas
. If they develop those destinations,
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people
will not try to
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move
in their future life.
For instance
, If bureaucrats build
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companies
in the
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area
,
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people
will
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get
work
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easily
.
Secondly
, the authorities should render medical provisions, transport amenities and education facilities. Children can go to school
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easily
by public transport. To illustrate,
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Veerpur
village, located in Gujarat, has all the facilities and it
was awarded
for the fastest developed village in India.
Overall
, Authorities should confer necessary amenities and better job.

This essay discussed contributing factors, such as work and all basic provisions.
In addition
, this essay discussed counter measures which are by building new
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companies
and bestow all provisions for
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people
of
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rural
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areas
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct e g Dinosaur dodos There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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