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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.10

Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. v. 10
With the progress and education quality, children will enjoy the formal education with best teaching methods. While some people think that the kids should be formally educated in early ages, others argue that it is not a good idea. I think the kids will be able to grab a massive amount of knowledge in their early ages if they admitted to the school. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide a conclusion with my opinion. To begin with, there are several reasons why kids should receive formal education as early as possible. Firstly, the children with small ages have a great capability to understand what they learn. Due to this fact, whatever information they receive, they will gather the knowledge which will stay with them for a long time. For example, if the early age student learned another language during his childhood, he will easily memories it and use it. Secondly, the kids in early ages have less pressure, therefore, they will give full attention to what they learn. Accordingly, they will enjoy formal education and develop their ability to process what they have studied. On the other hand, some considered formal education should start with an age of 7 for many points. To commence with, kids need attention from their families, hence, staying home will develop their emotions and behaviour. By doing this, the kids will enter formal education personally developed. For instance, the student self-confidence will be on the maximum level and will be able to easily cope with the school. Moreover, they will be aware of what is wrong and right. Accordingly, mixing with other students will not threat the kids character, and will be able to take his decisions with full awareness in dealing with other students and knowing the importance of education. To sum up, there is no doubt that enrolling the kids in early ages to formal education has a positive side, however; we should not ignore the advantages linked with admitting them until 7 years of age. I profoundly believe that getting a formal education in early ages is much better due to many reasons such as the ability to grab a wide range of knowledge in these ages.
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with best teaching methods. While
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should be
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, others argue that it is not a
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good
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. I
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will be able to grab a massive amount of knowledge in their
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early
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ages
if they admitted to the school. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide a conclusion with my opinion.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons why
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kids
should receive
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as
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early
as possible.
Firstly
, the children with
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small
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have a great capability to understand what they learn. Due to this fact, whatever information they receive, they will gather the knowledge which will stay with them for a long time.
For example
, if the
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early
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age
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student
learned another language during his childhood, he will
easily
memories it and
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use
it.
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, the
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kids
in
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have less pressure,
therefore
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, they will enjoy
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formal
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education
and develop their ability to process what they have studied.

On the
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hand,
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considered
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of 7 for
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points. To commence with,
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need attention from their families,
hence
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. By doing this, the
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will enter
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personally
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, the
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self-confidence will be on the maximum level and will be able to
easily
cope with the school.
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, they will be aware of what is
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and right.
Accordingly
, mixing with
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will not threat the
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kids
character, and will be able to take his decisions with full awareness in dealing with
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and knowing the importance of education.

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in
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to
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has a
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side,
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; we should not
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the advantages linked with admitting them until 7 years of
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. I
profoundly
believe that getting a
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formal
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education
in
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early
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is much better due to
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reasons such as the ability to grab a wide range of knowledge in these
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.
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8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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