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It is a fact that people are under more pressure nowadays and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue? v.1

It is a fact that people are under more pressure nowadays and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue? v. 1
The life of humans in today's society is becoming more and more stressful. People have to face many problems and overcome a lot of hurdles to live in the current society. There are a couple of reasons for this miserable life, some have family issues and some have office disturbance and while others have business disputes. In this essay, I will discuss some key reasons for stressful life and in the end, I will give solutions to the situation. Firstly, the main problem which is causing our lives more problematic is the traffic problem, whether you have to go to college, school or office, have to overcome the traffic congestion, blockage or line-in in at the traffic signals. Heavy rush at roads causes the stress and when they reach their destination still they are feeling the miseries of the route, and at the end, they are not so fresh to start their day. The same situation while going back home adding up to the office tension and resulting in home fights. Secondly, the household problems are adding a huge part in stressful life. When you have less income than your expenditure than problems start in your married life and having one kid adds up the tension. You always worry about grocery, garments, rents and bills; these all necessities dominate your income and leave you with only tensions. These problems could be eradicated wisely by taking decisions. You can overcome traffic problems by shifting nearer to your office or business. The government can balance this issue by building multi-tier flats in nearby commercial areas or commuting transports or trams to office thus reducing the travel time and miseries. Another step Government should be taking is by lowering the bills and grocery items and setting the minimum wages for the general public. But eventually, every person should have to take steps to remove the stress by own efforts or helping each other to live a happy life.
The
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of humans in
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today
's society is becoming more and more stressful.
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People
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have to
face
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many
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problems
and overcome
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a lot of
hurdles to
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live
in the
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current
society. There are a couple of reasons for this miserable
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life
,
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some
have family issues and
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some
have
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office
disturbance and while others have business disputes. In this essay, I will discuss
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some
key reasons for stressful
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life
and in the
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end
, I will give solutions to the situation.

Firstly
, the main
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problem
which is causing our
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lives
more problematic is the
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traffic
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problem
, whether you
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have to
go to college, school or
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office
,
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have to
overcome the
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traffic
congestion, blockage or line-in in at the
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traffic
signals. Heavy rush at roads causes the
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stress
and when they reach their destination
still
they are feeling the miseries of the route, and at the
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end
, they are not
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so
fresh to
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start
their day. The same situation while going back home adding up to the
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office
tension and resulting in home fights.

Secondly
, the household
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problems
are adding a huge part in stressful
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life
. When you have less income than your expenditure than
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problems
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start
in your married
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life
and having one kid
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adds
up the tension. You always worry about grocery, garments, rents and bills; these all necessities dominate your income and
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leave
you with
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only
tensions.

These
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problems
could
be eradicated
wisely
by taking decisions. You can overcome
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traffic
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problems
by shifting nearer to your
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office
or business. The
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government
can balance this issue by building multi-tier flats in nearby commercial areas or commuting transports or trams to
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office
thus
reducing the travel time and miseries. Another step
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Government
should be taking is by lowering the bills and grocery items and setting the minimum wages for the
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general public
.
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But
eventually
, every person should
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have to
take steps to remove the
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stress
by
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own
efforts or helping each other to
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live
a happy
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life
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is a fact that people are under more pressure nowadays and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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