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It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. v.2

It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. v. 2
Some people believe that boundaries between countries become less evident each year due to the rapid development of globalisation. Although this trend has some drawbacks, I would agree that the benefits of globalisation outweigh the drawbacks. One the one hand, I believe that globalisation has many positive impacts on our life. Firstly, by globalisation business become increasingly international. Multinational companies tend to do more business across the world. So, they can produce products in some place and trade it in another. For example, McDonald's company opened many branches on every street across the world. Secondly, the globalisation offers more job opportunities to people in developing countries and encourage investment in it. By this, they fight poverty and low socioeconomic status. Finally, free trade between countries could strength the political relationships between countries and this may result in more peace and long friendship between them. Because of the free trade policy, many developing countries are now exporting goods to developed countries and that in terms of revenue generating is a huge sector. For instance, many Asian third world countries are generating their lion share of foreign currency reservation by exporting readymade garments. This has been possible only because of the globalisation. On the other hand, globalisation is not beneficial to everyone. One problem is that globalisation could lead to increase redundancy and job loss in developed countries. Companies can move to developing countries where labour is cheap. Also, this associated with poor working and low salaries in developing countries. Another drawback is that globalisation can lead to increase waste production and pollution. This affects the human health negatively. In conclusion, I would argue that the benefits of globalisation outweigh the negative impact. Also, there should be globalisation regulation for the salaries and the working environment and the government should impose laws to protect the environment from pollution.
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believe that boundaries between
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become less evident each year due to the rapid development of
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globalisation
. Although this trend has
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drawbacks, I would
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that the benefits of
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outweigh the drawbacks.

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the one hand, I believe that
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globalisation
has
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impacts on our life.
Firstly
, by
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business become
increasingly
international. Multinational
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companies
tend to do more business across the world.
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So
, they can produce products in
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some
place and trade it in another.
For example
, McDonald's
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company
opened
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many
branches on every street across the world.
Secondly
, the
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globalisation
offers more job opportunities to
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people
in
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developing
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countries
and encourage investment in it. By this, they fight poverty and low socioeconomic status.
Finally
, free trade between
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countries
could strength the political relationships between
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countries
and this may result in more peace and long friendship between them.
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of the free trade policy,
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developing
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countries
are
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now
exporting
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goods
to developed
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countries
and that in terms of revenue generating is a huge sector.
For instance
,
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Asian third world
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are generating their lion share of foreign currency reservation by exporting
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garments. This has been possible
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of the
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globalisation
.

On the other hand
,
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globalisation
is not beneficial to everyone. One problem is that
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globalisation
could lead to increase redundancy and job loss in developed
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countries
.
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Companies
can
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move
to
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developing
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countries
where
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labour
is
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cheap
.
Also
, this associated with poor working and low salaries in
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developing
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countries
. Another drawback is that
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globalisation
can lead to increase waste production and pollution. This affects the human health
negatively
.

In conclusion
, I would argue that the benefits of
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globalisation
outweigh the
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negative
impact.
Also
, there should be
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globalisation
regulation for the salaries and the working environment and the
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government
should impose laws to protect the environment from pollution.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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