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Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements in the standard of living. v.1

Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements in the standard of living. v. 1
Many hold on to this view that today mankind’s way of life is surrounded by a wide range of advanced facilities and that exerts profound impacts on nature. I am of those individuals who strongly concur with this idea. In this essay, it is going to be assessed some effects resulting from modern lifestyle. As the main issue which could stem from developing urban life is that the communities increase the utilisation of natural resources ranging from oil and gas to forests and water, to improve social facilities in the mega cities. By the way of illustration, some governments devise the plans to ascend the urban areas by deforestation projects. The second considerable plight is the fact that the technologic equipment cause widespread environmental pollution all around the world, which undoubtedly, the health of human being could be brought about those pollutions. For example, in some big cities of the world, the air pollution caused by automobile's exhaust has been turned to the serious crisis. As the third stumbling block of the advanced way of life, it could be noticed that people have got used to spending their time working with novel devices ranging from computers to smartphones and also video games. The side effect of such habits could negatively affect the families` relationships. As a result, the member of families, especially the youngsters would feel lonely even if they live together. In conclusion, by all the reasons mentioned above, it undeniably seems that despite a variety of merits of developed lifestyle, human being suffers the difficulties organised from the modern changes. However, the adequate and integrated management could conduct the mankind to make the earth to a better place to live.
Many
hold on to this view that
today
mankind’s way of life
is surrounded
by a wide range of advanced facilities and that exerts profound impacts on nature. I am of those individuals who
strongly
concur with this
idea
. In this essay, it is going to
be assessed
some
effects resulting from modern lifestyle.

As the main issue which could stem from developing urban life is that the communities increase the
utilisation
of natural resources ranging from oil and gas to forests and water, to
improve
social facilities in the mega cities. By the way of illustration,
some
governments
devise the plans to ascend the urban areas by deforestation projects. The second considerable plight is the fact that the
technologic
equipment cause widespread environmental pollution all around the world, which
undoubtedly
, the health of human being could
be brought
about those pollutions.
For example
, in
some
big
cities of the world, the air pollution caused by automobile's exhaust has
been turned
to the serious crisis.

As the third stumbling block of the advanced way of life, it could
be noticed
that
people
have
got
used
to spending their time working with novel devices ranging from computers to smartphones and
also
video games. The side effect of such habits could
negatively
affect the families` relationships.
As a result
, the member of families,
especially
the youngsters would feel lonely even if they
live
together.

In conclusion
, by all the reasons mentioned above, it
undeniably
seems that despite a variety of merits of developed lifestyle, human being suffers the difficulties
organised
from the modern
changes
.
However
, the adequate and integrated management could conduct the mankind to
make
the earth to a better place to
live
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements in the standard of living. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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