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It has been proven that smoking kills. In some countries, it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your a v.1

It has been proven that smoking kills. In some countries, it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules. Give reasons for your a v. 1
Vaccination has always been a way of preventing diseases in children. There is an ongoing debate on its necessity and harmful effect as some claimed that it is not important and has adverse consequences. This essay will discuss the importance of vaccination and the benefit in preventing diseases. The opposition by some parents to the immunization of their children is not out of place. This is due adverse medical reaction and long term health challenges traced to it. For example, a Polio vaccine produced by GlaxoSmithkline pharmaceuticals and distributed in northern Nigeria by the World Health Organisation (WHO) was found to have substances that increased the blood pressure of people who took the vaccines. The company eventually settled and paid compensation of $2billion to the victims. There is also a myth around immunization in some part of Africa, where it is alleged to have caused infertility even though there is no medical research to validate such claims. The unpleasant experience some parents have had and the unconfirmed stories are factors that are responsible for the push back. Despite the above reasons, I think it is preposterous for people not to get immunized considering the obvious benefits. Vaccinations are results of many years of medical research into preventable sicknesses. It has been proven over the years that a lot of diseases such as polio, meningitis, cholera e. t. c. , can be prevented by immunization. The effect leaves the victim with permanent deformities and in some cases blindness. The impact is far reaching on society as they become dependent on others for survival. A recent survey by WHO revealed that 95% of deformities caused by polio could have been prevented during childhood if vaccines were taken. Prevention is proven to be better than cure, taking the vaccine is a way of giving children a productive future. In conclusion, the essay discussed the criticality of immunizing children against preventable health challenges and its advantages.
Vaccination has always been a way of preventing diseases in
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children
. There is an ongoing debate on its necessity and harmful effect as
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some
claimed that it is not
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important
and has adverse consequences. This essay will discuss the importance of vaccination and the benefit in preventing diseases.

The opposition by
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some
parents to the immunization of their
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children
is not out of place. This is due adverse medical reaction and long term health challenges traced to it.
For example
, a Polio
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vaccine
produced by
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GlaxoSmithkline
pharmaceuticals and distributed in northern Nigeria by the World Health
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Organisation
(WHO)
was found
to have substances that increased the blood pressure of
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people
who took the
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vaccines
. The
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company
eventually
settled and paid compensation of $2billion to the victims. There is
also
a myth around immunization in
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some
part of Africa, where it
is alleged
to have caused infertility
even though
there is no medical research to validate such claims. The unpleasant experience
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some
parents have had and the unconfirmed stories are factors that are responsible for the push back.

Despite the above reasons, I
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think
it is preposterous for
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people
not to
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get
immunized considering the obvious benefits. Vaccinations are results of
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many
years of medical research into preventable sicknesses. It has
been proven
over the years that
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a lot of
diseases such as polio, meningitis, cholera e. t. c.
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,
can be
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prevented
by immunization. The effect
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leaves
the victim with permanent deformities and in
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some
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cases
blindness. The impact is
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far reaching
on society as they become dependent on others for survival. A recent survey by WHO revealed that 95% of deformities caused by polio could have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
during childhood if
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vaccines
were taken
. Prevention
is proven
to be better than cure, taking the
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vaccine
is a way of giving
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children
a productive future.

In conclusion
, the essay discussed the criticality of immunizing
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children
against preventable health challenges and its advantages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It has been proven that smoking kills. In some countries, it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules. Give reasons for your a v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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