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It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. v. 2
A strong perception about successful people about their dedication towards work and not bothering about personal front has been noted widely. Among both lives, if one gets neglected, the other is bound to be affected as well. This essay will talk in favour of this argument and will present the opinion at the end. Maintaining a balance between work and other areas of life is the key to happy well being. It directly affects your close ones. While slogging away in your profession makes you successful on the career front, it will probably make you lose your loved one's. In order to be successsful, you somewhere or other requires support from family and friends. You cannot do everything on your own and would certainly require their hands to support you while you work towards professional strides. Working towards work-life balance will build the foundation of healthy and happy relationship. For instance, because of imbalance in one's life between personal and professional area, divorce rates are high. In addition to this, if one is not serious in their job, they would not be able to grow professionally. Personal sacrifices are necessary at some point of time to carve the successful path. This will further help in paving the way for future achievements. For example, if one leaves the office early, comes to the office late and keeps a backlog of their work because they have commitments towards their home life, it is definitely not the good sign of professionalism. To conclude, in my opinion, maintaining a work-life balance is of utmost importance as by doing this only one would feel the taste of success and gain love from their loved ones.
A strong perception about successful
people
about their dedication towards
work
and not bothering about personal front has
been noted
widely
. Among both
lives
, if one
gets
neglected,

the other
is bound
to be
affected
as well
. This essay will talk in
favour
of this argument and will present the opinion at the
end
.

Maintaining a balance between
work
and other areas of life is the key to happy
well being
. It
directly
affects your close
ones
. While slogging away in your profession
makes
you successful on the career front, it will
probably
make
you lose your
loved
one's. In order to be
successsful
, you somewhere or other requires support from family and friends. You cannot do everything on your
own
and would
certainly
require their hands to support you while you
work
towards professional strides. Working towards work-life balance will build the foundation of healthy and happy relationship.
For instance
,
because
of imbalance in one's life between personal and professional area, divorce rates are high.

In addition
to this, if one is not serious in their job, they would not be able to grow
professionally
. Personal sacrifices are necessary at
some
point of time to carve the successful path. This will
further
help
in paving the way for future achievements.
For example
, if one
leaves
the office early,
comes
to the office late and
keeps
a backlog of their
work
because
they have commitments towards their home life, it is definitely not the
good
sign
of professionalism.

To conclude
, in my opinion, maintaining a work-life balance is of utmost importance as by doing this
only
one would feel the taste of success and gain
love
from their
loved
ones
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
280 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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