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It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. v. 6
In the last decades, many fields of our society have had a rapid development which has brought a several changes with it. In today’s society it is necessary to get the right people into the right seats. However, older workers may set in their ways and potentially against changes, I would still consider the importance of their valuable experience in all workplaces. Broadly spoken, elder workers gained knowledge during all their work life, and this is a benefit that has to be kept in every environment. Despite having a deep and modern knowledge acquired during the studies can be really helpful, hands on experience is really valuable for every kind of job. For example, An Engineer who used to work in a construction industry for almost 20 years, he will be more competent and prolific in dealing with issues and challenges that he might facing during his career. For this reason, although workers over 50 are not very responsive to change, they are still really useful. Moreover, older people are more reliable and respectful than younger workers. That can be seen with the trend of many department store in the UK to take on older people. This act of behaviors are really important in the prosperity in any kind of working environment. Furthermore, despite the progress of business has to be stimulated, social reasons like employment of people from different age groups is still really crucial for the security of our societies. A slower but sustainable development has to be granted in order to maintain the right balance among the people of a whole community. On the other hands, there are a number of job roles that enforce employers to employ younger workers. Since physiologists confirmed that the memory declines with age for people, it will be fruitless to appoint an older worker in specific industries. For example, technological industry that requires a person who is capable of dealing with a numerous amount of numbers, calculation, systems and information which are more available with younger employees than older workers. In conclusion, I believe despite employing older people might be a challenge in some particular jobs due to some reasons such as inflexibility to change, they can still be very useful and producers in many kinds of job environment for their substantial and valuable experience. In future I think corporates will get better at equalizes opportunities between younger and older workers to achieve better outcomes.
In the last decades,
many
fields of our society have had a rapid development which has brought a several
changes
with it. In
today
’s society it is necessary to
get
the right
people
into the right seats.
However
,
older
workers
may set in their ways and
potentially
against
changes
, I would
still
consider the importance of their valuable experience in all workplaces.

Broadly
spoken, elder
workers
gained knowledge during all their work life, and this is a benefit that
has to
be
kept
in every environment. Despite having a deep and modern knowledge acquired during the studies can be
really
helpful, hands on experience is
really
valuable for every kind of
job
.
For example
, An Engineer who
used
to work in a construction industry for almost 20 years, he will be more competent and prolific in dealing with issues and challenges that he might
facing
during his career.
For this reason
, although
workers
over 50 are not
very
responsive to
change
, they are
still
really
useful.

Moreover
,
older
people
are more reliable and respectful than
younger
workers
. That can be
seen
with the trend of
many
department store in the UK to take on
older
people
. This act of behaviors are
really
important
in the prosperity in any kind of working environment.

Furthermore
, despite the progress of business
has to
be stimulated
, social reasons like employment of
people
from
different
age groups is
still
really
crucial for the security of our societies. A slower
but
sustainable development
has to
be granted
in order to maintain the right balance among the
people
of a whole community.

On the other hands, there are a number of
job
roles that enforce employers to employ
younger
workers
. Since physiologists confirmed that the memory declines with age for
people
, it will be fruitless to appoint an
older
worker
in specific industries.
For example
, technological industry that requires a person who is capable of dealing with a numerous amount of numbers, calculation, systems and information which are more available with
younger
employees than
older
workers.

In conclusion
, I believe despite employing
older
people
might be a challenge in
some
particular
jobs
due to
some
reasons such as inflexibility to
change
, they can
still
be
very
useful and producers in
many
kinds of
job
environment for their substantial and valuable experience. In
future I
think
corporates
will
get
better at equalizes opportunities between
younger
and
older
workers
to achieve better outcomes.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. v. 6

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
404 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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