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It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v.2

It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v. 2
To begin with, it is no secret to anyone that being engaged in similar tasks will open the doors of expertise to the workers. In other words, when workers in any job and occupation, being a constructional worker, an employee working in an enterprise, a chief, or an assortment of other careers, work an elongated hours during various workdays on a specified task, it will improve his or her experience to a great extent. An example can drive this notion home. For more than five years, i have been working as the chief of a fast food restaurant in which the only served food is a special type of hamburger with a unique, personal recipe of mine. For five years, i have been preparing this special sandwich which put me in a prestigious place and rank among all other fast food centers in my city. In my opinion, the only reason that has led to my success and reputation lies behind the fact that i have gained noticeable experience not only about the food i make, but also about the customers, their tastes and their desires. If i have been doing different activities-making various food to be served in the restaurant, i would not become as successful as i am presently. Moreover, doing the same activities rather than different types of tasks will have a positive effect on the outcome of the job the workers do. Put it in other words, the more similar task the workers accomplish, the more productive the tasks and the more proficient the workers will be. In this line of thought, not only will the workers benefit from doing similar activities, but also the company they work for will become prosperous. As a result, since doing similar activities and tasks will shed light on the abilities and talents of the worker, they will in turn become more adept and proficient and less amount of time will be spend in order to do the job. As an illustration, my sister works as a translator in a company and from the first day of her job, he assured the manager to be the Persian to English translator not vice versa. Having focused on one task instead of engaging in two or three different ones related to translating, she has mastered her translation ability and she therefore is proficient enough to accomplish a simple task in a limited time. However, her other co-workers who have been struggling and delving themselves into various types of translation, cannot be as productive as my sister is for the company. In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that working similar tasks during workday is more beneficial and satisfactory for the workers. Not only will they become expert and gain enough experience in their responsibilities, but also they become proficient and productive for the company they work for.
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with, it is no secret to anyone that
being engaged
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similar
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tasks
will open the doors of expertise to the
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workers
. In
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other
words, when
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workers
in any
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job
and occupation, being a constructional
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, an employee working in an enterprise, a chief, or an assortment of
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other
careers,
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work
an elongated
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hours
during various workdays on a specified
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task
, it will
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improve
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his or her
experience to a great extent. An example can drive this notion home. For more than five years,
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i
have been working as the chief of a
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fast
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food
restaurant in which the
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only
served
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food
is a special type of hamburger with a unique, personal recipe of mine. For five years,
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i
have been preparing this special sandwich which put me in a prestigious place and rank among all
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other
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fast
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food
centers in my city. In my opinion, the
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only
reason that has led to my success and reputation lies behind the fact that
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i
have gained noticeable experience not
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only
about the
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food
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i
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make
,
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also
about the customers, their tastes and their desires. If
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i
have been
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doing
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different
activities-making various
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food
to
be served
in the restaurant,
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would not
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become
as successful as
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i
am
presently
.

Moreover
,
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the same activities
rather
than
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different
types of
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tasks
will have a
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positive
effect on the outcome of the
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job
the
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workers
do. Put it in
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other
words, the more
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similar
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task
the
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workers
accomplish, the more productive the
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tasks
and the more
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proficient
the
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workers
will be. In this line of
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, not
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benefit from
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activities,
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also
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they
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for will
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prosperous.
As a result
, since
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doing
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activities and
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tasks
will shed light on the abilities and talents of the
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worker
, they will in turn
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become
more adept and
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proficient
and less amount of time will be
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spend
in order to do the
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job
. As an illustration, my sister works as a translator in a
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company
and from the
first
day of her
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job
, he assured the manager to be the Persian to English translator not vice versa. Having focused on one
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task
instead
of engaging in two or three
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different
ones related to translating, she has mastered her translation
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ability and
she
therefore
is
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proficient
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enough
to accomplish a simple
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task
in a limited time.
However
, her
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other
co-workers who have been struggling and delving themselves into various types of translation, cannot be as productive as my sister is for the
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company
.

In conclusion
, having considered the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that working
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similar
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tasks
during workday is more beneficial and satisfactory for the
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workers
. Not
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only
will they
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become
expert and gain
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enough
experience in their responsibilities,
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also
they
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become
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proficient
and productive for the
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company
they
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work
for.
24Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
482 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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