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The educational system has evolved with time, by including the latest subjects and engagement of the students with various classes of projects. Some of the projects relate to teamwork, while the others are more of individual centric. So, depending upon the strengths, interests and the future goals of a scholar, he should choose any approach. The essay will outline both of these aspects in detail and will be concluded with an opinion. One of the prominent reasons to choose a task which is related to the team work, is if a student has a keen interest in taking part in the organization related huge projects and the capacity to handle the pressure of these, then he should learn more of these sort during his academic learning phase. For instance, In IT companies, such as TCS, Wipro there are projects which are of worth millions, and they are on long term may be 2 years or more, in these types of assignments there is an enormous team working to complete and deliver the project. Moreover, these categories of projects are long term, so they bolster in building patience and mental strength among the professionals. On the other hand, the obvious reason to work as an individual is, if a professional wants to work on a short term project and explore new concepts in his daily life. In other words, if a person gets bored by doing the same stuff over a longer period of time, then he should opt for smaller projects. A good example of this is, the freelancing IT professionals work on small assignments, which is to be delivered in a month's time, consequently they learn new ideas in a short time frame. Furthermore, these short time activities can give a chance to work on multiple projects at the same timetime and thereby gaining more financial benefits. To conclude, in my opinion, it is up to an individual student to evaluate and know his strengths before he selects any type of project. Both of these type support in enhancing and inculcating certain skill sets in a professional.
The educational system has evolved with
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time
, by including the latest subjects and engagement of the students with various classes of
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projects
.
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Some of the
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projects
relate to teamwork, while the others are more of individual centric.
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So
, depending upon the strengths, interests and the future goals of a scholar, he should choose any approach. The essay will outline both of these aspects in detail and will
be concluded
with an opinion.

One of the prominent reasons to choose a task which
is related
to the team
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work
, is if a student has a keen interest in taking part in the organization related huge
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projects
and the capacity to handle the pressure of these, then he should learn more of these sort during his academic learning phase.
For instance
, In IT
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companies
, such as TCS,
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Wipro
there are
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projects
which are of worth millions, and they are on long term may be 2 years or more, in these types of assignments there is an enormous team working to complete and deliver the
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project
.
Moreover
, these categories of
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projects
are long term,
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so
they bolster in building patience and mental strength among the professionals.

On the other hand
, the obvious reason to
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work
as an individual is, if a professional wants to
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work
on a short term
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project
and explore new concepts in his daily life.
In other words
, if a person
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gets
bored by doing the same stuff over a longer period of
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time
, then he should opt for smaller
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projects
. A
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good
example of this is, the freelancing IT professionals
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work
on
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small
assignments, which is to
be delivered
in a month's
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time
,
consequently
they learn new
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ideas
in a short
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time
frame.
Furthermore
, these short
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time
activities can give a chance to
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work
on multiple
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projects
at the same
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timetime
and thereby gaining more financial benefits.

To conclude
, in my opinion, it is up to an individual student to evaluate and know his strengths
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before
he selects any type of
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project
. Both of these type support in enhancing and inculcating certain
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skill
sets in a professional.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay printed material will be soon replaced by internet sources v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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