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is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. v. 1
In the contemporary era, having some knowledge of finance is advisable for survival in the earth. For doing own business or doing the job one must some financial. Nowadays, educational institute must teach their students how to deal when encountering in the real world. This essay will discuss why it is pivotal to learn wealth management skill in high school. It is a debatable topic, teaching financial affairs at this age is not good as one should only do the subjects which they need in the future otherwise it will create a burden on them. For example, if somebody wants to become a civil engineer, so for what is the use of studying finance would be this is will be still a question unless they want to do their own business. However, it's not beneficial for them, but for managing personal expense is must in today's time if they don't know how to deal to do that all their studies is just waste if they just can even manage their own personal expense. Thus, there is not an option, it should be a compulsory subject to teach the students in the academy. Although, it requires a lot of money and experience and its more time consuming as if we start today at a certain point it can be achieved. For instance, hiring a professional teacher or organising seminars will be beneficial at an earlier stage as when the students will deal with real situations and the real world they don't have to face any kind of problem. To sum up, financial lesson are must in today's era, to deal with the world. There should be special community school classes a related to money management it requires time, money and lots of effort, but once its established to make everyone prepare for their lives.
In the contemporary era, having
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some
knowledge of finance is advisable for survival in the earth. For doing
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own
business or doing the job one
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must
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some
financial. Nowadays, educational institute
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must
teach their students how to
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deal
when encountering in the real world. This essay will discuss why it is pivotal to learn wealth management
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skill
in high school.

It is a debatable topic, teaching financial affairs at this age is not
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good
as one should
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only
do the subjects which they need in the future
otherwise
it will create a burden on them.
For example
, if somebody wants to become a civil engineer,
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so
for what is the
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use
of studying finance would be this is will be
still
a question unless they want to do their
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own
business.
However
, it's not beneficial for them,
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but
for managing personal expense is
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must
in
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today
's time if they don't know how to
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deal
to do that all their studies is
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just
waste if they
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just
can even manage their
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own
personal expense.

Thus
, there is not an option, it should be a compulsory subject to teach the students in the academy.

Although, it requires
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a lot of
money and experience and its more
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time consuming
as if we
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start
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today
at a certain point it can
be achieved
.
For instance
, hiring a professional teacher or
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organising
seminars will be beneficial at an earlier stage as when the students will
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deal
with real situations and the real world they don't
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have to
face any kind of problem.

To sum up, financial lesson are
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must
in
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today
's era, to
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deal
with the world. There should be special community school classes a related to money management it requires time, money and lots of effort,
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but
once
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its
established to
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make
everyone
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prepare
for their
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lives
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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