As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good? v.1
As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. v. 1
Although some people do not accept that we change as we grow, it is natural to have some changes in our social manners. I think there are some differences between young children`s and elderly people`s social manner.
Firstly, young children are more open-minded. They express their thoughts and feelings more clearly than adults. When we get older, we are able to retain our feelings. Some people say that this manner is good, because when people are open-minded, there manners are more honest. Other people believe that this change in manner is good, because it is selfish to express feelings and thoughts openly. I concur with changes in social manner, as sometimes it is wrong to express our feelings openly.
Secondly, young children are in a hurry in every case. They can take wrong steps while they are in a hurry. By contrast, adults think about something thousand times, and then move.
Finally, in my opinion there are some changes in relationships with people. Young children become more respectful and courteous when they get older. As they become adult, they enter to some organizations like universities, they communicate with some important people who can change their behavior. For instance, they get to socialize with professors. Professors are able to teach young children which manners are useful. Thus, when children become older, their social manner changes for the better.
Consequently, I think it is inevitable that everyone`s social manner changes from their childhood into adulthood. Moreover, this changes dependent on social conditions.
Although
some
people
do not accept that we
change
as we grow, it is natural to have
some
changes
in our
social
manners. I
think
there are
some
differences between
young
children`s
and elderly
people`s
social
manner.
Firstly
,
young
children
are more open-minded. They express their thoughts and
feelings
more
clearly
than adults. When we
get
older, we are able to retain our
feelings
.
Some
people
say that this
manner
is
good
,
because
when
people
are open-minded, there manners are more honest. Other
people
believe that this
change
in
manner
is
good
,
because
it is selfish to express
feelings
and thoughts
openly
. I concur with
changes
in
social
manner
, as
sometimes
it is
wrong
to express our
feelings
openly
.
Secondly
,
young
children
are in a hurry in every case. They can take
wrong
steps while they are in a hurry. By contrast, adults
think
about something
thousand
times, and then
move
.
Finally
, in my opinion there are
some
changes
in relationships with
people
.
Young
children
become more respectful and courteous when they
get
older. As they become adult, they enter to
some
organizations like universities, they communicate with
some
important
people
who can
change
their behavior.
For instance
, they
get
to socialize with professors. Professors are able to teach
young
children
which manners are useful.
Thus
, when
children
become older, their
social
manner
changes
for the better.
Consequently
, I
think
it is inevitable that
everyone`s
social
manner
changes
from their childhood into adulthood.
Moreover
, this
changes
dependent on
social
conditions.
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