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Is it better that the students wear uniforms at school or let them free to choose their own style of cloth? explain why. v.1

Is it better that the students wear uniforms at school or let them free to choose their own style of cloth? explain why. v. 1
Over the years, there has been a reduction in laws and regulations guarding the building of houses and office structures. Consequently, the public is now constructing structures haphazardly. In my opinion, the disadvantage such as its lack of safety outweighs any minor benefit it might possess. Admittedly, one basic upside of having less restrictions regarding housing and office building structures is that it avails the builder an opportunity to build without limits. In other words, the owner of the house can build whatever layout or design he or she desires and even anywhere he wants without any worry about breaking any rules. For example, ever since the Lagos State Government took down the laws against building storey buildings in riverine areas, there has been a noticeable increase in such structures all over Lagos. Also, another advantage of such laxity is that individuals will not bother to get quality materials for the construction of such houses and at the end this will be cheaper for the owner. Nevertheless, despite these advantages above, I believe that there are some serious drawbacks to building houses and offices however one desires. Firstly, the tendency of using obsolete and substandard materials increases. This ultimately results in the construction of houses that cannot stand the test of time and this might cause tremendous problems in the future. To illustrate, in 2015, there was a recent collapse of the Badagry High School in Lagos as a result of using below par materials. The collapse of this building led to the loss of many lives. Secondly, another drawback is that these structures might be built in such a way that it obstructs flow of traffic. This could be detrimental as it could result in traffic connections, thus, causing unnecessary delays. In conclusion, while less laws might give house owners a chance to build without any barriers, the drawbacks such as traffic congestion and loss of lives outweigh any of the acclaimed benefits it might have.
Over the years, there has been a reduction in laws and regulations guarding the
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building
of
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houses
and office
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structures
.
Consequently
, the public is
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now
constructing
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structures
haphazardly
. In my opinion, the disadvantage such as its lack of safety outweighs any minor benefit it
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might
possess.

Admittedly
, one basic upside of having
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less
restrictions regarding housing and office
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building
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structures
is that it avails the builder an opportunity to build without limits.
In other words
, the owner of the
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house
can build whatever layout or design he or she desires and even anywhere he wants without any worry about breaking any
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rules
.
For example
, ever since the Lagos State
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Government
took down the laws against
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building
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storey
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buildings
in riverine areas, there has been a noticeable increase in such
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structures
all over Lagos.
Also
, another advantage of such laxity is that individuals will not bother to
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get
quality materials for the construction of such
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houses
and at the
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end
this will be cheaper for the owner.

Nevertheless
, despite these advantages above, I believe that there are
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some
serious drawbacks to
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building
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houses
and offices
however
one desires.
Firstly
, the tendency of using obsolete and substandard materials increases. This
ultimately
results in the construction of
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houses
that cannot stand the
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test
of time and this
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might
cause tremendous problems in the future. To illustrate, in 2015, there was a recent collapse of the
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Badagry
High School in Lagos
as a result
of using below par materials. The collapse of this
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building
led to the loss of
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many
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lives
.
Secondly
, another drawback is that these
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structures
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might
be built
in such a way that it obstructs flow of traffic. This could be detrimental as it could result in traffic connections,
thus
, causing unnecessary delays.

In conclusion
, while
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less
laws
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might
give
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house
owners a chance to build without any barriers, the drawbacks such as traffic congestion and loss of
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lives
outweigh any of the acclaimed benefits it
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might
have.
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IELTS essay Is it better that the students wear uniforms at school or let them free to choose their own style of cloth? explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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