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Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. v.1

Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. v. 1
In recent days, watching movies on mobile phone or tablet culture become popular. Few people think that seeing movies on above mentioned devices, save their money and time. So they are enjoying their videos with these small devices. But other's opposing this type of culture and stating that to watch a movie on big screen gives full joyful moment. In this essay I am going to discuss both the views and I have a strong reason to support watching movies in a cinema theatre gives immense pleasure. To begin, nowadays both men and women are working with companies and they have to travel in a bus or train to reach their destiny. At that spare time they are interested in watching favourite dramas in their gadgets. Also, they are thinking that it helps to save their money and engage their free times. For example, many of my friends are working in textile companies, they always says that watching serials in their free times using phones makes them convenient. On the other hand, many people interested in theatre to see the movies. They suggested that entertainment should be always separate. They do not mix with any other activities. Spending time, relaxing and watching on big screen gives uncontrolled happiness. For example, My relatives monthly, twice spend their weekends in malls & theatres and they say that it gives intensive happiness than watching in small devices. In my opinion I strongly believe that watching a movie on wider screen always relaxing. Though it's still expensive & required additional days, still I believe it's a way to get a great pleasure.
In recent days, watching
movies
on mobile phone or tablet culture become popular. Few
people
think
that seeing
movies
on above mentioned devices, save their money and
time
.
So
they are enjoying their videos with these
small
devices.
But
other's opposing this type of culture and stating that to
watch
a
movie
on
big
screen
gives
full joyful moment. In this essay I am going to discuss both the views and I have a strong reason to support watching
movies
in a cinema
theatre
gives
immense pleasure.

To
begin
, nowadays both
men
and women are working with
companies and
they
have to
travel in a bus or train to reach their destiny. At that spare
time
they
are interested
in watching
favourite
dramas in their gadgets.
Also
, they are thinking that it
helps
to save their money and engage their free
times
.
For example
,
many
of my friends are working in textile
companies
, they always
says
that watching serials in their free
times
using phones
makes
them convenient.

On the other hand
,
many
people
interested in
theatre
to
see
the
movies
. They suggested that entertainment should be always separate. They do not mix with any other activities. Spending
time
, relaxing and watching on
big
screen
gives
uncontrolled happiness.
For example
, My relatives monthly, twice spend their weekends in malls &
theatres and
they say that it
gives
intensive happiness than watching in
small
devices.

In my opinion I
strongly
believe that watching a
movie
on wider screen always relaxing. Though it's
still
expensive & required additional days,
still
I believe it's a way to
get
a great pleasure.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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