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Internet is the source from where we can get information in the world. Whether to use internet in a useful way or to create problems for future totally depends from person to person. The statement that “some people think that internet provides us with v v.2

Internet is the source from where we can get information in the world. Whether to use internet in a useful way or to create problems for future totally depends from person to person. The statement that “some people think that internet provides us with v v. 2
First of all, the internet is the major source which can be accessed easily. From the information on a first grade student’s classwork to a businessman handling big companies, anything can be easily searched on the internet. No matter, internet also has many demerits in it due to which it might lead to the certain unwanted circumstances, but it is very beneficial. It is one of the best and the easiest way to search any subject, topic, information about anything going around the world. We can access to what is going around the world with just one click. The amount of convenience in having internet has made people’s life so easy. For example, my father saves a lot of his time by just searching on internet about his work and also about the news and other stuff. This saves a lot of his time and the most important we try to save paper by not using the newspaper and instead reading the same information on the internet. Secondly, I would say that internet has made a major impact for keeping people connected to each other. Through the various social media, we can communicate with each other so easily that we need not wait for phone call or anything. The video calls have made our lives so much better that we can text and talk to each other via video calls which no one would have dreamt about. In early times due to non-accessibility of phones and internet people could not talk to each other and barely knew what was going around in the world but now they can so easily contact each other. From my personal experience I can share that my grandmother is very old and she cannot walk and her kids stay abroad, she always wanted to meet them but could not go, now due to ease of internet she talks to her kids on phone and is also able to do the video calls which brings a smile to her face. Lastly, I would like to say that internet is useful for us as we can store all our data online. There are a lot of software and other things which made our lives so easy that there is no need of all written records but the data is stored online. No matter there are many harmful effects of internet too but the amount of ease and comfort the internet gives is praised by every second person. I would like to conclude with this that everything has its merits and demerits, but if we try not to do wrong things and always go on a positive path it will definitely be useful to us and to other with a lot less problems in our daily lives. Internet is one of the very useful sources of information, communication, data and many other things if used in a positive way.
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First of all
, the internet is the major source which can
be accessed
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easily
. From the
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information
on a
first
grade student’s classwork to a businessman handling
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big
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companies
, anything can be
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easily
searched on the internet. No matter, internet
also
has
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many
demerits in it due to which it might lead to the certain unwanted circumstances,
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but
it is
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very
beneficial. It is one of the best and the easiest way to search any subject, topic,
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information
about anything going around the world. We can access to what is going around the world with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
one click. The amount of convenience in having internet has made
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s life
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so
easy.
For example
, my father saves a
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lot
of his time by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
searching on internet about his work and
also
about the news and
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other
stuff. This saves a
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lot
of his time and the most
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important
we try to save paper by not using the newspaper and
instead
reading the same
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information
on the internet.

Secondly
, I would say that internet has made a major impact for keeping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
connected to each
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other
. Through the various social media, we can communicate with each
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other
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so
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easily
that we need not wait for phone
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call
or anything. The video
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calls
have made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
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so
much better that we can text and talk to each
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other
via video
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calls
which no one would have dreamt about. In early times due to non-accessibility of phones and internet
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people
could not talk to each
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other
and
barely
knew what was going around in the world
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but
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now
they can
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so
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easily
contact each
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other
. From my personal experience I can share that my grandmother is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
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old and
she cannot walk and her kids stay abroad, she always wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
them
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but
could not go,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of internet she talks to her kids on phone and is
also
able to do the video
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
calls
which brings a smile to her face.

Lastly
, I would like to say that internet is useful for us as we can store all our data online. There are a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lot
of software and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
things which made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
easy that there is no need of all written records
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the data
is stored
online. No matter there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
harmful effects of internet too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
and comfort the internet gives
is praised
by every second person.

I would like
to conclude
with this that everything has its merits and demerits,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
if we try not to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
things and always go on a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
path it will definitely be useful to us and to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lot
less problems in our daily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. Internet is one of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful sources of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, communication, data and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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other
things if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Internet is the source from where we can get information in the world. Whether to use internet in a useful way or to create problems for future totally depends from person to person. The statement that “some people think that internet provides us with v v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
481 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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