As the price of international travel is more affordable, numerous states are trying to open their gate in order to attract more visitors to come to their countries. Both benefits and drawbacks of this issue will be explained in the following paragraphs and I will present my perspective in favour of being more welcome to global holidaymakers.
There are several upsides of this effort. First and foremost, it is capable of uplifting nation' s incomes, particularly in their tourism sector. Second but not less crucial, it bestows a new opportunity to their citizen to start a business which is related to tourism. Last but not least, it is able to make their tourism to be more popular rather than previous time.
Besides the benefits, there are two downsides by being more opened to foreign visitors. Firstly, this attempt makes their natural culture to be mixed with other nation' s cultures, if they do not conserve their culture properly it will gradually render an impact to their traditions. This effort, Secondly, also provides more chance to prosperous people to have more businesses which will impact impoverished society being more exploited and have a worsen condition.
By way of conclusion, I do appreciate the opposing view which believed that this endeavour will give some disadvantages. Nevertheless, from my perspective, it will give more strengths than its weaknesses as I already wrote it above. I do believe by continuing this attempt, those states and its communities are able to earn more incomes and make their tourism being well-known by countless people across the globe.
As the price of international travel is more affordable, numerous states are trying to open their gate in order to attract more visitors to
come
to their countries. Both benefits and drawbacks of this issue will be
explained
in the following paragraphs and I will present my perspective in
favour
of being more welcome to global holidaymakers.
There are several upsides of this effort.
First
and foremost, it is capable of uplifting
nation&
#039; s incomes,
particularly
in their
tourism
sector. Second
but
not less crucial, it bestows a new opportunity to their citizen to
start
a business which
is related
to
tourism
. Last
but
not least, it is able to
make
their
tourism
to be more popular
rather
than previous time.
Besides
the benefits, there are two downsides by being more opened to foreign visitors.
Firstly
, this attempt
makes
their natural culture to
be mixed
with other
nation&
#039; s cultures, if they do not conserve their culture
properly
it will
gradually
render an impact to their traditions. This effort,
Secondly
,
also
provides more chance to prosperous
people
to have more businesses which will impact impoverished society being more exploited and have
a worsen
condition.
By way of conclusion, I do appreciate the opposing view which believed that this
endeavour
will give
some
disadvantages.
Nevertheless
, from my perspective, it will give more strengths than its weaknesses as I already wrote it above. I do believe by continuing this attempt, those states and its communities are able to earn more incomes and
make
their
tourism
being well-known by countless
people
across the globe.
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