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International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their door to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages? v.1

International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their door to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
Globalization has opened the door for individuals to interact with different regions’ people and visiting other countries around the world. Looking at the trend, there has been an enormous increase in the number of aviation companies that forces them to reduce the airfares to sustain in the market. As a result, countries are welcoming more tourists from different parts around the world to increase the economy of the country that fulfil the career opportunities for local people. There are pros and cons of increasing tourists that I will explain in this essay. To begin with, there are numerous benefits of tourists visiting the country. One clear benefit is that it gives local people career or job opportunities. In addition to this, it strengthens the country’s overall growth as well. New Zealand’s wealth for instance, is totally relying on tourists. Besides this, increasing communication flow among people from different parts of the world, play a pivotal role in the development of technology and the economy, but also promoting the cultural exchange between different countries. On the other hand, it has some negative effects too. Increasing number of tourists from various places, there is a greater risk of disease getting transported to other nations. The current “Corona Virus”, for example, whose outbreak began in China, has caused a medical emergency to break out in many countries. Consequently, it affects the import-export business and lowering the countries' overall economy and many aviation companies have to bear the loss due to cancelled flights. Apart from this, sometimes youngsters may be attracted to the western culture which the tourists bring with them and many local people feel a threat to their culture. To sum up, I would concede that increasing the number of tourists does come with some adverse effects. Despite that fact benefits created by it outweigh the drawbacks. A wise thought would be to take more benefits out of this and keeping up the efforts to minimize the negative impact.
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different
regions’
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people
and visiting other
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countries
around the world. Looking at the trend, there has been an enormous increase in the number of aviation
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companies
that forces them to
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reduce
the airfares to sustain in the market.
As a result
,
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countries
are welcoming more
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tourists
from
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different
parts around the world to increase the economy of the
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country
that fulfil the career opportunities for local
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people
. There are pros and cons of
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increasing
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tourists
that I will
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explain
in this essay.

To
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begin
with, there are numerous
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benefits
of
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tourists
visiting the
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country
. One
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clear
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benefit
is that it gives local
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people
career or job opportunities.
In addition
to this, it strengthens the
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country’s
overall
growth
as well
. New Zealand’s wealth
for instance
, is
totally
relying on
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tourists
.
Besides
this,
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increasing
communication flow among
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people
from
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different
parts of the world, play a pivotal role in the development of technology and the economy,
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but
also
promoting the cultural exchange between
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different
countries.

On the other hand
, it has
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some
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negative
effects too.
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number of
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tourists
from various places, there is a greater
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risk
of disease getting transported to other nations. The
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current
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The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona Virus
”,
for example
, whose outbreak began in China, has caused a medical emergency to break out in
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many
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countries
.
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, it affects the import-export business and lowering the countries'
overall
economy and
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many
aviation
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companies
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have to
bear the loss due to cancelled flights. Apart from this,
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sometimes
youngsters may
be attracted
to the western culture which the
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tourists
bring with them and
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many
local
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people
feel a threat to their culture.

To sum up, I would concede that
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increasing
the number of
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tourists
does
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come
with
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some
adverse effects. Despite that fact
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benefits
created by it outweigh the drawbacks. A wise
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thought
would be to take more
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benefits
out of this and keeping up the efforts to minimize the
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negative
impact.
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IELTS essay International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their door to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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