Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

International tourism is becoming the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, it often creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

International tourism is becoming the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, it often creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. v. 3
These days, it has been claimed that more tension than understanding between people from different cultures could be caused by the popularity of international tourism. In my opinion, I disagree with this view as I believe that this trend will promote cultural exchanges worldwide rather than conflicts. On the one hand, it is true that there are some certain conflicts once the tourism industry is sharply developing nowadays. Firstly, debates between nations could stem from language barriers. Indeed, when tourists travel to foreign countries, the difference of language can lead to misunderstanding when communicating with local people, conflicts, as a result will occur. Furthermore, international travellers could negatively impact on local culture. If they have some words or manners which are unsuitable for indigenous culture, they would bother or cause the sense of irritation to local people to some extent. However, I would argue that the development of international tourism could bring more merits for countries in worldwide. One of which is that this trend will boost cultural exchange on a global scale. Thanks to the significant increasing number of global travellers, nowadays traditional performance from Asian has been welcomed in Western countries, while Western fashion trends and model of architecture are spreading to Asian continents. Moreover, this development has stimulated the interest in indigenous cuisine that help hospitality industry witness a dramatic growth all over the world. Since then, it is more likely to promote the better understanding and open attitudes between tourists and local inhabitants. In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, it is true that the development of international tourism could create tension to some extent, I am convinced that this trend will help better understanding and even promoting open attitudes among both travellers and local people.
These days, it has
been claimed
that more tension than understanding between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures could
be caused
by the popularity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
. In my opinion, I disagree with this view as I believe that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trend
will promote cultural exchanges worldwide
rather
than conflicts.

On the one hand, it is true that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
certain conflicts once the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
industry is
sharply
developing nowadays.
Firstly
, debates between nations could stem from language barriers.
Indeed
, when tourists travel to foreign countries, the difference of language can lead to misunderstanding when communicating with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, conflicts,
as a result
will occur.
Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
could
negatively
impact on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
culture. If they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
words or manners which are unsuitable for indigenous culture, they would bother or cause the sense of irritation to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent.

However
, I would argue that the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
could bring more merits for countries in worldwide. One of which is that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trend
will boost cultural exchange on a global scale. Thanks to the significant increasing number of global
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
, nowadays traditional performance from Asian has
been welcomed
in Western countries, while Western fashion
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trends
and model of architecture are spreading to Asian continents.
Moreover
, this development has stimulated the interest in indigenous cuisine that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
hospitality industry witness a dramatic growth all over the world. Since then, it is more likely to promote the better understanding and open attitudes between tourists and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
inhabitants.

In conclusion
, for the reasons I have mentioned above, it is true that the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
could create tension to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, I
am convinced
that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trend
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
better understanding and even promoting open attitudes among both
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay International tourism is becoming the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, it often creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts