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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v.7

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 7
On the one hand holiday makers from all around the world increased the wealth in many areas on the planet. On the other hand, the international tourism also come with negative aspects of the location’s humans and nature. This essay will discuss the positive and negative effect of global travel. First of all we will have a look at the most obvious advantage of international tourism for locals in tourism hotspots: the financial benefit. Many mountain village farmers in the European alps used to live a very basic life until their land was converted into skiing areas for example. Before their villages became a glory skiing destination like in Soelden in Austria, these farmers were among the poorest people in Europe and often did not even have running water. Nowadays, these families are often rich hotel operators, or own a lift company and belong to the wealthiest people on the continent. Similar developments happen in all areas around the world, which are discovered as a tourist hotspot. The local habitants usually benefit financially and can lift their standard of living. Nevertheless, with a destination becoming more popular with tourists, there are always negative impacts coming with it. Previously poor islands with only a few thousand inhabitants suddenly become popular and need to host millions of tourists every year, like in Bali for instance. The local infrastructure has never been built to deal with a large number of tourists and rubbish and sewage systems are over their capacity limit. If the speed of growth in tourist numbers were matched by the speed of growth of the local infrastructure, there would not be a problem, but in reality, places like Bali have outgrown the public facilities by far and in the end the nature suffers. Not only the nature, but also the local people, who get stuck in traffic, suffers from air pollution caused by the large number of visitors and the effluence landing in the ocean. Overall, there are positive as well as negative points of international travel and in some tourist destinations the disadvantages definitely outweigh the benefits. However, if the growing visitor numbers and potential growth of an area were recognised early enough by the local governments, then many of the negative aspects of a tourism industry can be avoided,
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, the international
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also
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aspects of the location’s humans and nature. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
effect of global travel.

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we will have a look at the most obvious advantage of international
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for
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locals
in
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hotspots: the financial benefit.
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mountain village farmers in the European alps
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to
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very
basic life until their land
was converted
into skiing
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for example
.
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Before
their villages became a glory skiing destination like in
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Soelden
in Austria, these farmers were among the poorest
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people
in Europe and
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did not even have running water. Nowadays, these families are
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rich hotel operators, or
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own
a lift
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company
and belong to the wealthiest
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people
on the continent. Similar developments happen in all
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around the world, which
are discovered
as a
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tourist
hotspot. The
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local
habitants
usually
benefit
financially
and can lift their standard of living.

Nevertheless
, with a destination becoming more popular with
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tourists
, there are always
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negative
impacts coming with it. Previously poor islands with
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only
a few thousand inhabitants
suddenly
become popular and need to host millions of
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tourists
every year, like in Bali
for instance
. The
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local
infrastructure has never
been built
to deal with a large
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number
of
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tourists
and rubbish and sewage systems are over their capacity limit. If the speed of growth in
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tourist
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numbers
were matched
by the speed of growth of the
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local
infrastructure, there would not be a problem,
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but
in reality, places like Bali have outgrown the public facilities by far and in the
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end
the nature suffers. Not
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the nature,
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also
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, who
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stuck in traffic, suffers from air pollution caused by the large
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number
of visitors and the effluence landing in the ocean.

Overall
, there are
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positive
as well
as
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negative
points of international travel and in
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tourist
destinations the disadvantages definitely outweigh the benefits.
However
, if the growing visitor
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numbers
and potential growth of an
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were
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recognised
early
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by the
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governments
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of the
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negative
aspects of a
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tourism
industry can
be avoided
,
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IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
6.5
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