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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. v.12

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. v. 12
It is a fact that international tourism has already become a popular and huge industry these days, and many towns and cities have taken the benefits of it. However, some people worry that the activity might have a negative effect on the local communities. The following essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of international tourism. However, I believe that it has more benefits than the drawbacks. On the one hand, some people think that international tourism activities bring some disadvantages for the local societies. The main reason is that they are afraid that the local environment would be distracted as more and more people come to the place. For example, Mount Everest is one of the top destinations for international travellers, but it is reported that the amount of garbage that tourists produce has increased rapidly in the past few years. Consequently, it might have a catastrophic effect on the local environment there. Another reason is that tourists would bring some negative cultures to the local people. For instance, some western people like to drink the alcoholic beverage, and elders of the local societies are afraid that the local people would also be interested in drinking those liquors. Finally, the treat of the terrorist attack is another negative aspect of international tourism according to many. On the other hand, many people believe that travelling abroad for leisure activities would bring a lot of benefits for the destination places. Firstly, it creates a lot of job opportunities for the local people as some of them could become tour guides or can run small businesses. Secondly, when foreign travellers come to a country, they will spend their money for various activities. It means that they will also bring revenue to the local government in the form of tax. As a result, the government would have enough budgets for maintaining the public facilities around the places and the local environment as well. Lastly, it also attracts investors in building resorts and hotels in the surrounding areas. The development of these places will absorb many employments not only from the local area but from other cities and countries as well. In conclusion, despite its negative effects, I personally believe that global tourism industries would bring more benefits to the local inhabitants and communities. It boosts the economic condition of the country and creates job opportunities for the local people. As for the negative effects, it really depends on how the government would make clear regulations and implement them.
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international
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tourism
has already become a popular and huge industry these days, and
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many
towns and cities have taken the
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benefits
of it.
However
,
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some
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people
worry that the
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activity
might have a
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negative
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effect
on the
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local
communities. The following essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of
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international
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tourism
.
However
, I believe that it has more
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benefits
than the drawbacks.

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some
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people
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think
that
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international
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tourism
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activities
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bring
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some
disadvantages for the
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local
societies. The main reason is that they are afraid that the
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local
environment would
be distracted
as more and more
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people
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come
to the
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place
.
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, Mount Everest is one of the top destinations for
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international
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travellers
,
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but
it
is reported
that the amount of garbage that tourists produce has increased
rapidly
in the past few years.
Consequently
, it might have a catastrophic
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effect
on the
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local
environment there. Another reason is that tourists would
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bring
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some
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negative
cultures to the
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local
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people
.
For instance
,
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some
western
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people
like to drink the alcoholic beverage, and elders of the
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local
societies are afraid that the
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local
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people
would
also
be interested
in drinking those liquors.
Finally
, the treat of the terrorist attack is another
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negative
aspect of
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international
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tourism
according to
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many
.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
believe that travelling abroad for leisure
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activities
would
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bring
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a lot of
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benefits
for the destination
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places
.
Firstly
, it creates
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a lot of
job opportunities for the
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local
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people
as
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some
of them could become tour guides or can run
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small
businesses.
Secondly
, when foreign
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travellers
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come
to a country, they will spend their money for various
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activities
. It means that they will
also
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bring
revenue to the
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local
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government
in the form of tax.
As a result
, the
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government
would have
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enough
budgets for maintaining the public facilities around the
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places
and the
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local
environment
as well
.
Lastly
, it
also
attracts investors in building resorts and hotels in the surrounding areas. The development of these
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places
will absorb
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many
employments not
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only
from the
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local
area
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from other cities and countries
as well
.

In conclusion
, despite its
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negative
effects, I
personally
believe that global
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tourism
industries would
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bring
more
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benefits
to the
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local
inhabitants and communities. It boosts the economic condition of the country and creates job opportunities for the
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local
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people
. As for the
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negative
effects, it
really
depends on how the
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government
would
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make
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clear
regulations and implement them.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
414 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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