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integrated speaking ( question 3)The university will apply a new policy on which all sold food in the main cafeteria will be organic food. v.1

integrated speaking ( question 3)The university will apply a new policy on which all sold food in the main cafeteria will be organic food. v. 1
High school graduates are routinely taking a year of their education after convocation. Although, doing this might lead to a spontaneous loss of interest in study while also stunting their progress, they will also gain valuable life experiences that will benefit them later in life. In my own view, I would not encourage any student to suspend their education, in spite of, its rewards. Education is a continuous process that requires constant motivation. So, suspending one's schooling at any point can result in a general loss of interest in the process. This is due to the fact that, young people are generally enticed by the independence in the case of travelling and the financial incentive that comes with working. This is evident by, the astronomical number of high school graduates that outright refuse to further their education in Nigeria. In fact, new found freedom and better financial status could convince them to abandon schooling completely. However, there are positives associated with high school graduates taking a year break, for travelling of employment purposes. The greatest benefit of adopting this line of thought, is that they would be to gain valuable life experiences from interactions with strangers in their journeys or workplace. Therefore, this will develop their maturity and interpersonal relationship. This qualities are relevant to great university career and in life general. For example, the experiences of my time as receptionist has been of assistance in my interactions with my patients as a nurse. To conclude, students are increasingly being advised to either try the labour market or explore the world for a year after graduation. This has proven to increase the dropout rate significantly after high school, despite the, life experience gained from taking this step.
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High
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school
graduates are
routinely
taking a year of their education after convocation. Although, doing this might lead to a spontaneous loss of interest in study while
also
stunting their progress, they will
also
gain valuable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiences
that will benefit them later in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. In my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
view, I would not encourage any student to suspend their education,
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in spite of
, its rewards.

Education is a continuous process that requires constant motivation.
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So
, suspending one's schooling at any point can result in a general loss of interest in the process.
This is due to the fact that
, young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
generally
enticed by the independence in the case of travelling and the financial incentive that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with working. This is evident by, the astronomical number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
graduates that outright refuse to
further
their education in Nigeria. In fact,
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
new found
freedom and better financial status could convince them to abandon schooling completely.

However
, there are positives associated with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
graduates taking a year break, for travelling of employment purposes. The greatest benefit of adopting this line of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
, is that they would be to gain valuable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiences
from interactions with strangers in their journeys or workplace.
Therefore
, this will develop their maturity and interpersonal relationship.
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This
qualities are relevant to great university career and in
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life
general.
For example
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experiences
of my time as receptionist has been of assistance in my interactions with my patients as a nurse.

To conclude
, students are
increasingly
being advised
to either try the
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labour
market or explore the world for a year after graduation. This has proven to increase the dropout rate
significantly
after
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high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, despite
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the,
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life
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experience
gained from taking this step.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay integrated speaking ( question 3)The university will apply a new policy on which all sold food in the main cafeteria will be organic food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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