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Integrated speaking 3-5)A Notice from Public Safety A new parking policy is being instituted starting next year. Previously, faculty and staff were given first preference of parking passes, then commuting students, then the remaining passes were given out v.1

Integrated speaking 3-5)A Notice from Public Safety A new parking policy is being instituted starting next year. Previously, faculty and staff were given first preference of parking passes, then commuting students, then the remaining passes were given out v. 1
The argument over whether learning at home or at school is better for children has not been settled yet. While home education provides a better learning environment and opportunities for families to bond, schools can provide a range of material and human resources essential for holistic development of children. Ultimately, I think school experience is the best. There are several advantages for children who learn at home. It provides personalized learning environment for the child. In addition, it allows children to bond with their parents and siblings while learning. Many social problems are associated with families not spending enough quality together. Instruction is custom-designed and moves at the child’s own pace. The learning material can be tailor made to suit individual’s learning style. It provides better protection from bullies and others who might be a bad influence. On the contrary, school learning provides a very unique set of advantages for children. Schools encourage children to socialize with their peers and how to cope with gossip, bullying and peer-pressure. Schools play a big role in guiding children to choose their subject of interest from a wide range of disciplines. They have teachers who are trained in special subjects. What is more, schools can provide access to a range of physical resources such as sports equipment, musical instruments and library books. In today’s competitive world, schools are also equipped with an advanced sports infrastructure which enhances overall development one’s mental and physical health. Schools may present various difficult social situations, but so does the real world and children must learn to navigate these on their own.
The argument over whether
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learning
at home or at
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school
is better for
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children
has not
been settled
yet
. While home education
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provides
a better
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learning
environment and opportunities for families to bond,
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schools
can
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provide
a range of material and human resources essential for holistic development of
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children
.
Ultimately
, I
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think
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school
experience is the best.

There are several advantages for
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children
who learn at home. It
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provides
personalized
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learning
environment for the child.
In addition
, it
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allows
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children
to bond with their parents and siblings while
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learning
.
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Many
social problems
are associated
with families not spending
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enough
quality together. Instruction is custom-designed and
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moves
at the child’s
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own
pace. The
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learning
material can be
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tailor
made to suit individual’s
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learning
style. It
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provides
better protection from bullies
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and others
who might be a
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bad
influence.

On the contrary
,
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school
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learning
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provides
a
Consider using "unique".
very unique
set of advantages for
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children
.
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Schools
encourage
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children
to socialize with their peers and how to cope with gossip, bullying and peer-pressure.
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Schools
play a
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big
role in guiding
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children
to choose their subject of interest from a wide range of disciplines. They have teachers who
are trained
in special subjects.
What is more
,
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schools
can
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provide
access to a range of physical resources such as sports equipment, musical instruments and library books. In
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today
’s competitive world,
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schools
are
also
equipped with an advanced sports infrastructure which enhances
overall
development one’s mental and physical health.

Schools may present various difficult social situations,
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but
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so
does the real world and
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children
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must
learn to navigate these on their
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own
.
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IELTS essay Integrated speaking 3-5)A Notice from Public Safety A new parking policy is being instituted starting next year. Previously, faculty and staff were given first preference of parking passes, then commuting students, then the remaining passes were given out v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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